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Prepare for the effects of global climate change


greenw4y2 /  
Jul 29, 2015   #1
Topic: What are some things your country or government should do to prepare for effects of global climate change? (5-8 sentences)

I think government should do some things to prepare for effects of global climate change. First, government should encourage people to use public transport instead of cars or motorcycles . If this solution was applied successfully, we would reduce a great amount of smog released from cars and motorbikes everyday. Second, government should appeal to everyone for planting more trees. This measure will contribute to slow down the greenhouse effect which is one of the notable issues of the environment. In a word, the things that government should do to prepare for effects of global climate change are using public transport and planting more trees.

P.S. Please help me check this paragraph? Are there any mistakes? Is it well-structured?
Thank you :"3
Chamsky 1 / 3 2  
Jul 29, 2015   #2
Hi! greenw4y2

Here you have some corrections for you essay:

1: If this solution was applied successfully, we would reduce a great amount of smog released from cars and motorbikes everyday.
If this solution were applied successfully, we would reduce a great amount of smog released from cars and motorbikes everyday.

2: This measure will contribute to slow down the greenhouse effect which is one of the notable issues of the environment.(between effect and which should be a comma)

This measure will contribute to slow down the greenhouse effect, which is one of the notable issues of the environment.
Dawn01 19 / 33  
Jul 29, 2015   #3
Hi, greenw4y2 !!!
I have some minor suggestions:

- Second, government should appeal to everyone forencourage planting moretrees in order to limit the effects of deforestation.

- the thingsthe practical approachs that government should do..

-... and planting more trees...

Good luck !
Cheers!


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