Hi Norza,
First, just two things about forum rules; You need to have a meaningful essay topic (which you type under subject when you open a new thread) and you should post IELTS essays under "Writing Feedback" forum.
Majority people are working because of the money. Money is very important in our life and its bring us happiness and enjoy life , but i dont think that everybody is like that.
... Let's interchange these ideas and see;
Money is very important in everybody's life and in most of the cases it determines whether we are happy or not. Therefore, the primary reason for work is money. However, I do not think it should be the one and only one reason for one to be employed.Some people are working without payment and they need experience as satisfaction and service.
.... very good :)
So today I want to explain some other reason and have good example for my reasons.
Change the presentation of this a little bit;
This essay is focused on discussing some other reasons that promote people to work