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IELTS; Why do people work? Reasons/ Examples


norza 3 / 6  
Apr 5, 2013   #1
People work because they need money to live, what are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of this reason. Use a specific example and details to support your answer.

Majority people are working because of the money. Money is very important in our life and its bring us happiness and enjoy life , but i dont think that everybody is like that. Some people are working without payment and they need experience as satisfaction and service. So today I want to explain some other reason and have good example for my reasons.

Firstly, some people are working very hard as other people and they get low salaries as compare to other society or other nation. It's because of they are serving they nation or society. For example, I m refugee and in our society, most of government worker have good skill and good teacher have low salary. It's all are serving they nation. If you have good skill or ability in any job. It's sure that you get satisfies salary in other nation.

Second reason is some people are working every day as without payment. That we call volunteer. This kind of worker has some other reason to do work and no for money. May be its like sympathy or want to help for other people or they are trying to get experience. For example in our school, every year they have Korean medical student come in our school and they teach how to wash our teeth and check our teeth. It's all are volunteer member. They have very cool kind heart.

In finally I want to say that they lots of reason working in this world and not only money. So in this short time I have no enough time to explain ever thing. So working for money is good but not going over or greedier on that.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 6, 2013   #2
Hi Norza,
First, just two things about forum rules; You need to have a meaningful essay topic (which you type under subject when you open a new thread) and you should post IELTS essays under "Writing Feedback" forum.

Majority people are working because of the money. Money is very important in our life and its bring us happiness and enjoy life , but i dont think that everybody is like that.

... Let's interchange these ideas and see;
Money is very important in everybody's life and in most of the cases it determines whether we are happy or not. Therefore, the primary reason for work is money. However, I do not think it should be the one and only one reason for one to be employed.

Some people are working without payment and they need experience as satisfaction and service.

.... very good :)

So today I want to explain some other reason and have good example for my reasons.

Change the presentation of this a little bit;
This essay is focused on discussing some other reasons that promote people to work
Xiaokai Jin 11 / 23 5  
Apr 6, 2013   #3
Hi, norza , although i am not quite good at writing, i hope what i did could help you. If I were you, I would write the last paragraph like this.

In finally I want to say that they lots of reason working in this world and not only money. So in this short time I have no enough time to explain ever thing. So working for money is good but not going over or greedier on that.

In conclusion, apart from working for making money, there are still lots of people who work out of kindness and patriotism. For these reasons, I am convinced that people work not only for earning money but also for other lofty ideas. So please remember that making money is an essential part of life but making money is far from everything in life.
OP norza 3 / 6  
Apr 6, 2013   #4
Xiaokai Jin
thank you.. you conclusion part is nice and sound good. thank you .for you help


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