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People should use phone in correct occasions and should not use it in specific public areas; IELTS


logo3098 5 / 16 1  
Nov 11, 2014   #1
Q:Some people believe that mobile phones should be banned in public, especially on public transport, in restaurants and cinemas. Others think that mobile phones should be allowed to use anywhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Using mobile phones is more popular than before due to an age of information and changes of people's daily life. However, some people state that should not use phone in public; other believe that people can use phone in anywhere. My view is that mobile phones should be banned in special public places.

People who believe phones can use in anyplace have their reasons. First of all, it is obvious that human have rights to do their favorable things which is not illegal. This means that using phone in anywhere is not illegal behavior that is the right of people. So, from the law angle, it is reasonable that mobile phones is allowed to used in public.

In contrast, others believe that mobile phones should be banned using in public, specifically in library, hospital, and cinemas. This is because using phone in these special public is much ruder. If people speak loudly in these public, others will be affected by people who using phone. So, from the ethical angle, people should ban using phone is public.

Personally I agree that people should not use phone in special public place, including library, restaurants and cinemas. For example, someone use phone in library and speak loudly, which will cause noise in a quite atmosphere of library leading to affect people who study in library. Although it does not break the law, it is bad manners in public.

To sum up, people should use phone in correct occasions and should not use phone in special public places. Meanwhile, in terms of aspects of ethical, using phone in public is rude behaviors.
liliyaah 2 / 3  
Nov 12, 2014   #2
People who believe phones can use in anyplace have their reasons.

People who believe phones can be used anywhere have their reasons.

First of all, it is obvious that human have rights to do their favorable things which is not illegal. This means that using phone in anywhere is not illegal behavior that is the right of people.

First of all, it is obvious that human have rights to do what they like. This means that using phone wherever and whenever they want is not illegal as it is the human right of the people.
OP logo3098 5 / 16 1  
Nov 12, 2014   #3
who can give me some suggestion?
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Nov 12, 2014   #4
Shu, there is actually another way of discussing your personal point of view in this essay that you could have used. There are times when the use of cellphones in public places is discussed from an etiquette or social norm point of view. This dictates that mobile phone usage should not interfere with the movements, actions, or enjoyment of the people around the user. This means that the phone should be set to vibrate or text messaging only when in public places such as buses, libraries, museums, or even at home if you know that the people with you in the house wish to rest. It is typically seen as rude behavior to be talking loudly on your phone in public because it disrupts the others. While the use of cellphones cannot be banned, these establishments have the right to set a degree of decorum for the benefit of their clients. Therefore it would be best to not ban the use of cellphones in public places, but merely, regulate its use in order to balance the need to use technology with the needs of the other people.

That is just a suggestion on my part. I hope you consider it for inclusion in your personal point of view in order to give it more strength :-)
OP logo3098 5 / 16 1  
Nov 12, 2014   #5
Thank you so much,vangiespen
Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Nov 12, 2014   #6
First of all, it is obvious that human have rights to do their favorable things which is are not illegal
. This is because using phone in these special public is much ruder i think it would be better if you started your sentence in another way.


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