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TOEFL Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day


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Jan 30, 2014, 04:45am   #
TOEFL : Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

I have heard it many times that 'Health is Wealth'. There is nothing more important than your own health. So I would prefer that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day.
Regular exercise will provide relaxation to mind and body. Students generally will not study continuously. So after certain time they need refre--shment. Physical exercise will take their mind away from study for moments. This will eventually result in relaxation of mind and body.
Besides exercising regularly student will be healthy. Regular exercise also could be a game such as football, hockey, cricket and judo karate. Playing these games will make their bones and muscles stronger. Moreover playing these they will generate interest in sports as well. Some of the students may take one of the game as their career.
It will generate bilateral thinking in students. Students doing both that is study and regular exercise will generate dual thinking. They will be able to think in either way around. So overall development of a student will be achieved. They will be sharp in studies as well as in other activities.
Considering these many advantages i would prefer that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day.
Jan 30, 2014, 05:24am   #
vijay01:
I have heard it many times that 'Health is Wealth'. There is nothing more important than your own health. So I would prefer believe that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day.

Follow this structure for your introduction;

1. Hook - An interesting statement to catch the reader's attention
2. Background - Give the context to the reader
2.1. Definition of the question
2.2. Importance of the question (why it is important to discuss this argument)
3. Thesis statement - Express your view
Jan 30, 2014, 05:26am   #
1. I have heard it many times that 'Health is Wealth'.
2. So I would prefer it is my opinion that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day.
3. Physical exercise will take their mind away relieve students' stress from studies for a moment.
4. Besides exercising regularly will make students healthy.
5. Students who both study and exercise regularly will be able to do dual thinking.
6. After considering these many advantages that physical exercise has, I think physical exercise should be a required part of every school day.

As a student who took TOEFL several times, I think it will much clearer if you put 'First..., Second....,' after each main argument.
I say this only by way of suggestion so please remind my comments are not perfect way to write!
Good luck :)
Feb 9, 2014, 07:35pm   #
Your body paragraphs do not contain specific examples that are important for you to get a decent score. So you need to pay lots of attention to your essay structure. Dumi has suggested you a good structure for the intro. Follow this structure for your overall essay;
INTRODUCTION- hook+ background of your topic + State your opinion/ position
Body para 1; First reason for your opinion/ position + Specific example to support that reason
Body para 2 ; Second reason + example
Conclusion ; Final statement about your position.
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