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Dec 9, 2012, 06:54am   #
Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Although I admit that eating at food stands and restaurants is timesaving, I prefer to prepare and eat food at home. There are three reasons for that. First, it is healthier second, it is less expensive and third, it is like a hobby for me.

First, preparing and eating food at home is healthier. I go to the store and buy the best selected ingredients to cook with. Also, I wash and prepare them carefully. However, there is no guarantee that they do these at food stands or restaurants. For instance, I go out to eat food once or twice a month and I always have trouble with hair on my plate or dirty spoon/ knife.

Second, preparing and eating food at home is less expensive. I can buy some ingredients and cook any meal that I want to, however, I canít afford that meal in most of restaurants. Also, I bet I cook better than them. For instance, when my parents or my friends invite me for a dinner at an expensive restaurant, I reject them and insist on having a dinner in my place. They always leave by saying ` they love to have a dinner in my placeí.

Third, preparing and eating food at home is like a hobby for me. I can spend lots of time with cooking experiments. For instance, I had a recipe of macaroon from my colleague the previous day and I decided to make it after work. When I took my macaroons to work yesterday, all my colleagues loved them and appreciated my ambition.

For these reasons, I believe that I prefer to prepare and eat food at home because it is healthier, it is less expensive and, it is like a hobby for me.

Dec 9, 2012, 07:04am   #
This is a good essay for a number of reasons. You have understood the question correctly and answered it well. You have used examples for all your reasons to cook at home. And the argument is well presented. Perhaps you can add just a little bit more detail to the last reason (cooking as your hobby). Overall it's a good essay. Well done. :)
Just as Pahan said, the structure and examples were good. But if it is for toefl, I think it must be about 250-300 words. I think yours is less.
I suggest you to add a bit more sentences to your introduction and conclusion.
I am studying for toefl, and I have heard raters are a bit strict...
Dec 9, 2012, 03:03pm   #
thanks. yes it is for toefl. it is about 290 words but you are right should be +300.
I have heard about rates too and I need 24/30 :/
hai....
good eaasy well organized, though it ask your preferance and reasons,i feel it is better to reduce the use of I. It is allowed to use I but avoid over use.
It is easy to make it 300 words. A few sentences only needed.

You can enjoy cooking togrther with watching your favourate T.V programe..
It offers an excellent oppoertunity for family togetherness while preparing and saving food.

We dodn't know the ingradents of the food we took from the restaurents.
Unhealthy ingradients like colours, aginomoto and so on are dangerous for our health.
hotel food give us an opportunity to taste different kinds of foods and a change.
It is a blessing for people who have no cooking facilities like bachelors living away from home..

Moreover..

Make better introduction...

Hope this is enough for you to fill the necessory word strength..
Tessy..
Dec 10, 2012, 12:43am   #
Although I admit that eating at food stands and restaurants is time saving, I prefer to prepare my meals and eat food at home. There are three reasons for that. this preference. First, it is healthier; second, it is less expensive and third, it is like a hobby for me an enjoyable experience for me.

Good introduction with meaningful facts and also it is well presented. : )
However, take note of punctuation errors and other minor mistakes.
Dec 10, 2012, 04:11am   #
thanks dumi. you drew attention to points that make me confused.
I will follow your advices :)



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