Your points need more development. For example:
Old ways of communications are going down little by little. Traditional ways are becoming obsolete and this affects our beliefs,the new generation take it with levity
How does the decline in the usage of old ways of communication affect personal relationships, you need to explain it in detail. How does the levity of the youth affect the level of personal relationships?
Some points feel weak outright, for example:
For instance,someone traveling from one city to another to see a friend or a loved one risks his/her live
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This doesn't make much sense.
You should pick up this topic again, think really hard about it for 20 minutes write down points pertaining to the topic and try elaborating and organizing them