here is the prompt:
Some people fail on their school but achieve success in their adult life. Why do you think this will happen?
What causes/reasons may lead to a person's successful life?
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Were I you, I would start analyzing the prompt, like this:Topic/discussion: Some people fail on their school but achieve success in their adult life.
Task 1: Why do you think this will happen?
Task 2: What causes/reasons may lead to a person's successful life?
A more detailed look at the 2 tasks above, they are called two questions to answer. Therefore, both questions must be covered. As your reader, I didn't see you focus these 2 questions on the body paras.
My word: If you want to uplift your Task Responses/Achievement, then you'd better discuss the 2 tasks.
Surprisingly,It is so surprising that how they reached to outstanding success and become game changer in the world economy.
Hope this help :)