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Essay: Who should pay tuition fees? STUDENTS or the GOVERNMENT?

Aug 22, 2008   #1
It is sometimes argued that because the tertiary education is greater benefit to the individual than to the society, students should pay full fees? What is your opinion?

The problem that who is responsible for paying university tuition fees has been in dispute for many years. Many individuals express their approvals of self-paid tuition fees whereas others claim that it is the government's responsibility to subsidize tertiary education. From my point of view, I am convinced of the latter view owing to the following reasons.


By the way, Gloria, would you mind helping me with some confused words below? Because whenI write I dont know whether it's right or wrong!
Thanks so much for your help!

are there any words convey the same meaning. So that I can actively use them more naturally in writing?


- What does SOCIAL EVILS consist of?(ex: drug, smoking,alcoholic, diseases.....? I havent figured out the meaning of such word

- Would you mind differentiate between "ADOLESCENCE" and "PUBERTY" and "TEENAGE"?

- is POPULATION the same as POPULACE? How to use the word POPULACE?

I'm grateful for your assistance!
Looking forward to your answer!

Good afternoon.

Here are my comments:

"The problem as to who is responsible for paying university tuition fees has been in dispute for many years. Many individuals express their approval of self-paid tuition fees, whereas others claim that it is the government's responsibility to subsidize tertiary education. From my point of view, I am convinced of the latter view owing to the following reasons.

To begin with, that the government pours money into higher education is a crucial factor contributing to a prosperous and civilized society. It must be conceded that the human resource is of great importance to every nation. Investing in higher education, therefore, helps establish a high-quality labor force with great expertise in the future. That is the reason why virtually all developed countries such as France, the US, and Finland allocate huge amounts of national budgets onuniversity studies[/font] every year (Source?).

Another reason for higher education's subsidization is that it gives students from all walks of life the equal entitlement to further their education. If all students have to cover their own expenses of study in college, the chances are that only the well-to-do can afford tertiary education. How can disadvantaged and poor students have enough money to invest in higher education when they cannot even cope with difficulties making ends meet every day? Fortunately enough, tuition wavers and government grants are the ideal solutions to that problem, enabling all students to have an opportunity to cultivate their academic prowess, creating a healthy competitive studying environment among themselves.

Admittedly, there still exists a viewpoint that tuition fees should be self-covered since this may discourage students spending time, as well as the national budget, on drinking and sleeping during college class times. Nevertheless, those holding such an opinion could have ignored a great many ambitious and assiduous students whose tertiary studies are definitely out of the question should there be no financial aid. More seriously, once coming into effect, the policy of self-paid tuition fees at the university level may exacerbate the widening gap between the haves and the have-nots, creating a highly bifurcated society.

All things considered, budgets spent on higher education are indispensable these days, especially in a developing country like Vietnam. Not only should the authorities continue allocating resources for university educations but they ought to provide more money to support teachers and students in boosting up their performances as well."

Good job. A few mechanical errors, but your content looks good. You have a clear stance with good examples to support it. If possible, finding some statistics and a good source for the information regarding how much developed countries spend on university educations every year would bolster your argument even more.
In regards to your questions:

-"Tertiary" technically means "third place." For instance, primary school is first, secondary comes second, and college comes third; tertiary. So, technically, yes, "tertiary" is equivalent to a "higher education," which generally refers to college.

-No. The first statement is not a logical English statment. If you want to say someone is smart or you think they are smart, go with the second.

-Social evils are just what you think. Drinking, drugs, gambling, prostitution, etc. Anything that troubles an entire society is a social evil, or "social ill." The two phrases are interchangeable.

-Really, there is no difference between these three. "Adolescence" and "teenage" are probably the two most easily interchangeable because they can be confined to the years between 13 and 17. Puberty is a little trickier because it is biological and can happen before the actual "-teen" years. For instance, some kids go through puberty at 11 or 12, before they are "technically" teenagers.

-Almost. A population is the total number of people that live in a certain area (i.e. a town or country), regardless of their social status. A populace generally refers to those of the middle and lower class, excluding the higher class, both socially and economically. It can also mean exactly the same thing as population (tricky, huh?); you kind of have to just look at the context of how the word is being used to figure out which way it is being used.

I hope this helps.

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Aug 22, 2008   #3
You are so generous Gloria!
some other questions need solving, if you dont mind.

- Does ALLOCATE RESOURCES TO STH mean spend MONEY ON STH (nationally speaking)

- Do i have to add "S" to HUMAN RESOURCE(S) ? is it countable or uncountable when it comes to "many nations" or a nation ?

- THOSE HOLDING SUCH (A) VIEWPOINT ? After SUCH, is it necessary to add "a" before a noun??? Why do I usually see people using "SUCH STATEMENT, SUCH SOLUTION" without "A" despite their countable meaning???

again, I'm indebted to you, Gloria!
Good evening.

No problem; anything I can do to help! Let's see:

-If "STH" is a date, yes. To allocate something means to divide it up. In this case it sounds like money, so one would divide money up for payments on a specific date or to a specific indvidual/entity.

-Depending on your context, you may. For instance, a human resources department (HR) at a company would need to have the "s" added at the end. If, on the other hand, you are referring to manual labor hours, then you could use the singular human resource (likening it to a renewable resource such as paper, or a nonrenewable resource such as oil).

-This is a little bit trickier because it deals with attitude. If you are discussing the merits of a certain point of view, for example, one would "hold such a viewpoint" because it is one single idea or one single way of looking at a situation. If you are talking about more than one viewpoint, one would hold "such viewpoints" because the noun is now plural rather than singular. In a context where the "a" is missing, it is probably because the speaker/author desires to make himself/herself sound more authoritative or knowledgable about whatever they are discussing. For example: "So-and-so thinks such-and-such because of their economical situation. How could they make such statements?" It's sort of like you going to the doctor and saying you have a stomach ache and then him in turn telling his nurse you have an agitated gastrointestinal condition. Does that make sense?

Let me know if you have more questions!

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Aug 23, 2008   #5
I've another question

well-paid job OR well-paying job

well-paid workers ... is that true?

high-paid job OR highly-paid job OR high-paying job?

It seems to me that no one but I have so so many questions
Why dont people come to this forum to ask you for advice ???
Personally, I deem this forum as a marvellous place for individuals to horn their writing skills!
Another thing I want to tell you that I've taken all your suggestions to heart :D
How generous you are, Gloria!
Aug 23, 2008   #6
another two questions hichic:

- many nations spend money on "UNIVERSITIES STUDY" or "UNIVERSITY STUDIES" every year?

- to be a burden to sb (or OF SB)

-"Well paid job" for a job in the past, a "well paying job" for one currently being worked. "Well paid workers" is fine. "High paying" for one that is currently occupied, "highly paid" for one in the past.
Many nations spend money on university studies is correct because it is the verb (study) that is plural because there are more than one study. Now, there is obviously not multiple studies at the same university so the universitites are plural as well, but we leave "university" singular because it is the same type of subject. The plural study is happening to the singular subject of the university. Does that make sense? This happens often; car parts (many parts for the same subject, a car), phone cords, couch pillows.
-"To be a burden to" something is correct. We say "to" because in this instance we are causing an effect (being bothersome) to someone/thing else; we are taking action upon another entity, therefore "to." When we say "of" it is generally in the case where we are on the other end. We are the ones receiving the effects of the other's action. For instance, "Such ramifications are born of bad decision making." The consequences come from something else. Does this make sense?

Well, you know, I myself wonder the same thing. Probably because the service is free and people think that because it's free it's not a quality service, or that there are strings attached. Dunno!
I am more than happy to help, so anytime, ask away!

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Aug 25, 2008   #8
hello Gloria,
When talking about system of education, I looked up in the dictionary but 2 entries have SYSTEM in combination with EDUCATION, EDUCATIONAL. So

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