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TOEFL ESSAY- Learning about past has no value for those of us living in the present.(do you agree/disagree)

Someone gave invaluable statement that "Past is an experience, present is an experiment and future is an expectation". This statement teach us about improving our future by remember past experience. Past teach us lots of lesson. Learning those lessons are crucial for our happy future. Therefore I think that there is mismatch in statement that Learning about past has no value for those of us living in the present.
Past gives us preponderance experience which might be good or bad. Good experience seldom remembers by people but no one can forget their bad experiences. Bad experiences leaves indelible image on one's mind and this experiences teach people that they should not follow their mistake again. ...

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Sep 6, 2010, 05:25am   #
Jemsoo7 ,i have suggestion that you may change that example

jems007:
They made all rule for citizen to avoid accident, crime which happen in past. For example, everyone knows that wearing helmet is always good for bike rider. There are many evidence available which state that person had save his or her life in mishap on bike only due to wearing helmet. According to this study government made rule that wearing helmet is compulsory for bike rider which they learn from past mishaps. Similarly rule of wearing seatbelt while driving a car, banned on drunken driving etc., all these are example of same which formerly explain.


with some ideas that is more usefull and well known in development of technology, in which one generation knowledge and experience is used by younger generation for betterment of whole humanity. In this phase in development of computer, cars, airplanes, space technology and many more places from you can give examples.

I think that you understand my point.
it is said that : "Past is an experience, present is an experiment and future is an expectation". This statement shows that developing our future by remembering past experience. Past teaches us lots of lessons, which
Learning those lessons are crucial for our happiness in the future. Therefore
I think that there is mismatch in the statement that i'm in disageement with "Learning about past has no value for those of us living in the present".
actually, "mismatch" is kind of weird, and it's not appropriate here.
Sep 6, 2010, 01:22pm   #
jems007:
Good experience seldom remembers by people

I think here is the mistake and it should be improved this way: good experience is seldom remembered by people...
Every sentence below is the correct way. I challenge you to type each of these 10 times to practice the correct way. TEN TIMES! And speak each of these aloud ten times. It will only take you a half hour to practice this way, but you will get much better and learn good habits.

Someone gave invaluable statement, "Past is an experience, present is an experiment and future is an expectation". This statement teaches us about ...

...improving our future by remembering past experience.

The past teaches us lots of lessons.

Learning those lessons is crucial for our happy future.


The past gives us preponderance of experience which might be good or bad.

Good experiences are seldom remembered by people, but no one can forget their bad experiences.

Bad experiences leave indelible images on one's mind, and these teach people that they should not make their mistake again.

Additionally, rules made by the government are based on all their past experience.

Similarly the rule of wearing seatbelt while driving a car, the ban on drunken driving, etc. -- all these are examples of the logic I am trying to explain.

On the other hand, some people think that thinking about past makes them lose their present fun.

Hence, learning about past has precious value, because it helps us to improve our future life as well as alerting us about what we should do in present.
Someone gave invaluable statement that: "Past is an experience, present is an experiment and future is an expectation". This statement teaches us about improving our future by remembering past experience. Past teaches us lots of lessons. Learning those lessons is crucial for our happiness in the future. Therefore I don't think that Learning about past has no value for those of us living in the present.
Past gives us preponderance of experience which might be good or bad. Good experiences are seldom remembered by people but no one can forget their bad experiences. Bad experiences leave indelible image on one's mind and these teach people that they should not follow their mistake again. If they again encounter in same problem then it becomes easy to come out from that problem for those who have learn from their past experience. They can also give suggestion to other who is suffering from same problem. For example, every business man or entrepreneur start his or her business from basic level. In starting of business he or she might be encounter some major problem like wrong output of business, penalty for faulty work, unsuccessful to grab tender and etc. But from these things he or she could learn their mistake and these experiences may be most useful for him or her to become a successful entrepreneur.
Additionally, rules made by government are based on their past experience. They made all rules for citizen to avoid accident, crime which happen in past. For example, everyone knows that wearing helmet is always good for bike rider. Many evidences are available which state that bike rider had save his or her life in mishap only due to wearing helmet. According to this study government made rules that wearing helmet is compulsory for bike rider which they learn from past mishaps. Similarly rule of wearing seatbelt while driving a car, the ban on drunken driving etc., all these are example of improving life by past experience.
On the other hand, some people think that thinking about past loses their present fun. They think that one should forget about past and future to enjoy present. But I think that this is seems narrow minded thinking. They can't become success in their future life because they don't care about their mistake and don't have any future plans.
Hence, learning about past has precious value, because it help us to improve our future life as well as alerting us about what we should do in present.

tell me if there are more correction...thanks
jems007:
I am doing mistake in present tense..do you know any logic for that?

No, there is no logic! It is terrible, but you just have to memorize all the verb forms. That is the worst part of learning a language.

Let me look at the new essay...

No need for "that"
Someone gave invaluable statement: that "Thew past is an experience, present

You have to use "the" with past:
The past teaches us lots of lessons.

Do not capitalize learning because it is not a "proper noun":
Therefore I don't think that learning about past has no value for those of us living in the present.
It is better to say: Therefore, I do think learning about the past has value for us in the present.


The past gives us a preponderance of experience which might be good or bad.

On the other hand, some people think that thinking about past makes them lose their present fun.

They can't become successful in their future life because they don't care about their mistake and don't have any future plans.
Hence, learning about the past has precious value, because it help us to ...

Excellent!! This is great. I hope you practice each correction 10 times, because it is the only way to fine tune your English. You already do everything correctly in a general sense, and you just have miscellaneous mistakes to weed out of the garden of your writing.



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