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TOEFL - Parents (those who pay attention) are the best teachers. Agree or disagree?


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Aug 30, 2011, 09:43am   #1
Although parents are very sensitive about their children's education, they are not good teacher for them. Nowadays we live in a modern world, where many things are changing very fast such as sciences, human behaviors, and it is very hard to know about these changes. However, we learn a lot from our parents. They are not appropriate teacher.

First and foremost, parents not only do not have enough information about teaching, but also they need someone to help them how grow up their children. Being a good teacher needs a lot of prerequisites that most of parents do not have. For instance, they should have enough free time for spending with children in purpose of teaching or they should know about new ways and tools of education or they should be familiar with new educational materials.

Furthermore, parents do not have enough time to spend with their children. Nowadays we are facing a global economic crises and it is necessary for both parents to work, hence there is not enough time for them to teach their children. When I was a child both my mother and father worked in an office. They usually leaved home early in the morning and came back late in the evening. It was impossible for them to be a good teacher for me.

In addition, if parents want to be a teacher for they children, they usually transfer their positives and negatives behavior to them. They do this without any intention. After period of time, the children learn a lot of negative points from their parents but a professional teacher always aware of not to transfer their bad behavior to children.

In conclusion, parents who pay attention to their children future always should use teacher for their children. They give this change to their children to build up their skills in a good way with people who train for this.

Although parents are very sensitive I think you can replace the word sensitive to care or nervous about their children's education, they are not good teachers for them. Nowadays we live in a modern world, where many things are changing very fast such as sciences, human behaviors, and it is very hard to know about these changes. However, we learn a lot from our parents. They are not appropriate teachers.

First and foremost, parents not only do not have enough information knowledgeabout teaching, but also they need someone to helpteach them how togrow up nurturetheir children. Being a good teacher needs a lot of prerequisites that most of parents do not have. For instance, they should have getenough free time time is already a meaning of free so "free" can be removedfor spending with theirchildren in purpose of teaching teach is vt, it needs a noun to follow itor they should know about new ways and tools of education or they should be familiar with new educational materials.the last sentence is a bit complex. you can write for instances, first, they should get more time to spend with their children. Second, they should learn new methods and materials to teach them

Furthermore, parents do not have enough time to spend with their children. you have mentioned it at the previous paragraph. You should remove this point from that paragraph in order to mention it in this paragraphNowadays we are facing a global economic crises and it is necessary for both parents to work, hence there is not enough time for them to teach their children. When I was a child both my mother and father worked in an office. They usually leaved home early in the morning and came back late in the evening. It was impossible for them to be a good teacher for me. you can better use some idioms like "earn ends meet" to emphasis the urge of working

In addition, if parents want to be a teacher for they children, they usually transfer their positives and negatives behavior to them. They do this without any intention. you can simply use "unintentionally" to add to the previous sentences, otherwise it will look redundantAfter aperiod of time, the children willlearn a lot of negative pointsbehaviours from their parents but a professional teacher always aware of not to transfer their bad behavior to children.

In conclusion, parents who pay attention to their childrenchildren's future always shouldshould always use hireteacher a teacher or teachers??for their children. They give this change to their children to build up their skills in a good way with people who train for this.

try to minimize a sentence into a word and i think you do not have a lot of supporting evidence to support your point because you do not have enough elaboration
Aug 30, 2011, 09:40pm   #3
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Nowadays we live in a modern world, where many things are changing very fast such as sciences, human behaviors, and it is very hard to know about these changes. However, we learn a lot from our parents. They are not appropriate teacher.

I think there is no logic between these sentences.But I cannot find out how to modify it.

Nowadays we live in a modern world, where many things are changing very fast such as sciences, human behaviors, and it is very hard to know about these changes. We have learnt a lot from our parents at an early age,however,they are not appropriate teacher in modern high-speed development circumstance.

I hope it can help you.



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