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Parents should describe healthy diet food and support their children to take exercises


aseprudi 20 / 29 16  
May 27, 2015   #1
Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?


In modern life, children unhealthy lifestyle is considerable an accelerating trend. For this reason, they are tempted to eat unhygienic diet as there is no restriction from the parents; hence children consume it. They also have less physical activity, which cause their body are vulnerable to get disease. For this case, parents are considerable to measure this problem by rendering healthy diet and encouraging children to take exercise regularly. Instead, school is not responsible, they just concern on academic purpose.

In my personal perspective point of view, parents have a power to manage and create healthy behaviour for children since they are a root of children's development. Healthy behaviour focuses on supporting hygiene food and taking exercise regularly. First of all, parents should know kinds foods consumed by children. To exemplify, recent studies from British Heart Foundation (BHF) in 2013 confirms that parents always observe what sort of diets that children consume regularly. That is why they need to be responsible in terms of controlling and carrying children's health. In addition, parents encourage them to do physical activities regularly; hence, children can avoid the dire consequence from unhealthy lifestyle.

As an educational council, school does not get into unhealthy lifestyle problem attributed to their students, but they concern on academic purposes. For a pragmatic instance, in Indonesia, in terms of Indonesian regulation, the constitution number 20 in 2003 with regard to national education system reveals that school persuades students to acquire a great deal of knowledge. Even though it includes certain character, it does not incorporate the way to eat healthy diet. Teacher in class shares idea and understanding; hence the students understand and obtain new knowledge. To sum up, educational institution is not responsible to unhealthy lifestyle.

The aforementioned evidence shows that describing healthy diet food and supporting children to take exercise should be done by parents in order to create healthy style for children. However, although school is the second student's environment, they just concern to academic purposes. Where possible, children should follow parent's advice for eating balance between healthy diet and doing some exercise regularly hence they can get better health future.
siddiqumar 15 / 9 8  
May 28, 2015   #2
In modern life, children unhealthy lifestyle is considerably an accelerating trend.

Instead, a school is not responsible, they just concern on academic purpose.

However, although a school is the second student's environment, they just concern to academic purposes. Where possible, children should follow parent's advice for eating balance between healthy diet and doing some exerciseboth eating balance diet and doing some exercise regularly hence they can get better health in the future.
faarasyad 7 / 15 7  
May 29, 2015   #3
Hi, Asep

Let me give you some suggestions

In modern life, children unhealthy lifestyle is considerable an accelerating trend. For this reason, they are tempted to eat unhygienic diet as there is no restriction from the parents (lets examine this sentences, I think this statement quite amiguity due to nothing correlation with previous sentences); hence children consume it.


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