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Here are some corrections to your essay. Great structure! However, you could work on your arguments a little more.
the best teacher is
has been a controversial issue. Many anthropologists have
that parents are the ones who teach their children in the best way. From my perspective, I definitely approve of(/agree to)*
Parents have perceived their
weaknesses and strengths their
noone no one
in the world ... -- There are some people who believe that "noone" should be accepted as a correct form, but I think it is better to stick to the classic version.
Parents surely support and create chances
children to pursue their dreams. (Parents surely support their children to pursue their dreams.)
ot only do they
sacrifice for us(what do they sacrifice for us?)
the ones who want us to be successful the most. Indeed, children will consider their parents not only their love(this doesn't make sense),
but also the best teachers.
how hard their parents have suffered(too dramatic)(/struggled)
them a better life. [Not all children can see and appreciate their parents' efforts, so perhaps you should write: Children should learn to appreciate their parent's struggle to offer them a better life. If you chose to take this sentence you can change the following one to: This way they will also learn to think more responsibly when it comes to money.]
More importantly, parents are very experienced. They have been through a lot of obstacles before, that their children might one day have to face it. They will give us that precious advice without any hesitance. [I see what you mean, but it it isn't quite true. You and I both know that the moment you like someone you don't go to your parents asking for advice. When you fight with a friend you will not mention that to your parents. If they notice something's wrong and point that our, you'll be most likely to say "It's nothing, really" or "I'm just tired".]
Last but not least, what draws much of my consideration(to what?)
is study efficiency. It cannot be denied that most
children spend most of their
with their parents.
stand a have the
golden chance to learn anytime with their parents without having to travel to anywhere.Whenever they need help, children have their parents right by their sides. [... ok. Let's say Mary wants to study chemistry. Her mom's a housewife who forgot almost everything she studied and her dad is a lawyer. Can Mary's parents teach her whatever she needs to be thought in order to have a "brilliant, golden" future? No, sir, they cannot. If they will decide to sit next to her at home when she is learning all they'll be able to do is to aimlessly look at her.]
That will save parents
a lot of time and money
for parents in raising their children
. More remarkably, children suffer
from little pressure when they study with their parents.
They do not have to worry about goals and marks.
arents understand their children abilities, so they won'
t push them. [On the contrary, knowing the abilities of their children parents will try to push them, because they know if they leave learning up their kids they'll most likely just hang around and play, because that's what ultimately kids wanna do. That's what makes parents ultimately good teachers; they show us that nothing in life can be achieved without pushing ourselves.]
Without doubt, parents have the
tendency to bring the effectiveness to their children's studying career(too complicated). (Without doubt, it is parents who teach us to be effective at whatever we are doing.)
In conclusion, not only personal happiness, but also parental encouragement and the eff
studying are the convincing reasons of
my approval why I consider parents to be the best teacher one can have
. I highly recommend that anthropologists should thoroughly consider my essay to adopt a proper decision on the discussion of who
to be the best teacher is. [You sound as if you are the one who could elucidate the mysteries behind their problems. You shouldn't ask them to consider your essay, you should try to make very strong points so you know for sure that they will consider your essay.]
- approve(vb. used without object) = to speak or consider favorably (sometimes followed by of ): The boss wouldn't approve of the plan.
To me personally "to approve of sth." sounds quite authoritarian. I feel like it's a rather strong word to use when meaning to say that you agree to something.