It is always better you include the purpose of your writing (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE etc.) in the title.
always write the prompt of the essays!
Yes, Abdurasul is right. you should include the full prompt with your essay so that other members can provide you with more meaningful comments.
The first thing the reader sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read. Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.
A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro should be the best part of your essay. If you could, state your own opinion in the introduction itself with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. That helps you take the reader in your desired direction.