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Nurture has only limited impact on early human development compared to Nature


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Nov 16, 2008, 03:20am   #1
Nurture strongly influences early human development. Discuss

For Centuries people have wondered what role does ' Nature ' or in other words one's inherent traits from birth ,and 'nurture' or the role of one's environment (physical ,cultural social and familial ) play in the development of ones social and psychological Identity. Parents endeavor to raise the perfect child , the one that mirrors their values and goals .But many times they are startled to discover a stranger in their nest, when the child they raised is nowhere close to what they want him to be. Recent researches show that nature plays a major role in the shaping of an individual rather than nurture. This essay will reveal how nurture has only a limited impact on early phases of human development as compared to nature.
Cases where an individual turns out to be a good person in spite of tremendous environmental conditions clearly makes the case for parents and other environmental factors to have relatively lesser influence on a child's growth .The life story of the scientist George Washington Carver would be a very good example . He emerged from slavery to become one of the worlds most respected and honored men .Here one asks the question of where did all the courage and strength come from to deal with such hard and terrible conditions, when there was no obvious environmental cause. The very believable answer to this question would be that these individuals were born with it , it was in their genes . If outstanding individuals can raise poor offspring and poor parents can produce excellent offspring , differences in parenting within the normal range are unlikely to have major effect on a child's character and personality.


Another question that surely amazes scientist is the similarity seen when identical twins who possess a very similar genetic make up are raised far apart in completely different environments .Five such studies conducted recently in three different countries show an average correlation of 0.75 in such twins .This clearly is a very powerful evidence displaying the power of genes. But when the twins are brought up to gather in the same environment they correlate about 0.85 . This indicates that the difference in correlation of these twin being reared to gather was only 0.1 ,which is a very small value .Also , adopted children reared in the same environment displayed zero IQ resemblance .This suggests that the effects on children with same environment but different genetic makeup being reared under the same household is close to nil .
Poor rearing by parents is often considered an important factor in the development of a criminal . A study was conducted among adopted children whose biological mothers were criminals or convicts and adopted children whose mothers didn't have a criminal background .The results were surprising , The former were more likely to have been arrested ( 15 % versus 2% ) , convicted ( 13 % versus 1%) and incarcerated ( 10 % versus 0% ) and are often found to have a very antisocial personality .Conversely , no such relationship was found for the adoptees and their adoptive parents. If criminality was something learned from parents a relationship would surely emerge out between the adoptees and adoptee's parents.
Sometimes, certain diseases also play an important role in shaping of an individual .For instance , the infant maybe born deaf , blind or brain damaged if the infant's mother contracted German measles in the first three month of her pregnancy. Wolfram's syndrome is another condition associated with blindness and deafness , majority of people suffering from this syndrome are psychologically disturbed and have suicidal tendency .This disease usually affects 1 in every 100,000 person. Diseases like these play a major role in growth and development and growth of an individual.
There are plenty of researches that conclude that an individuals biology affects many psychological and mental aspects of a individual's behavior and character .Once an individual is aware of this evidence , he /she can surely detect faults in many researches and studies conducted by media or incorporated in textbooks talking about environmental influences and particularly parenting on early phases of infants growth. While considering environmental influence one should know that people often construct their own environment and this choice is largely influenced by their genetic traits .For example ,Smart Studious and intelligent students would select harder courses in school than other average student. The effect of environmental influences and parenting are important but their impact is far too limited.

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As you did not describe what type of assistance you were seeking, I have edited the first section and given some general comments in regards to the remainder of your piece:

"For Centuries This is neither a proper noun nor the first word of a sentence; as such, it shouldn't be capitalized. people have wondered what role does "Nature" Again, capitalization. Also, when using quotation marks, make sure you are using the double (") quotation marks. There should also be a comma after "nature" but still inside the quotation marks. or in other words, one's inherent traits from birth ,and Watch the improper use of spaces. 'nurture' See notes from above, as they apply here. or the role of one's environment (physical ,cultural Spacing; also, make sure you are placing a comma after each item in your list. For instance, there should be commas after "physical," "cultural," and "social." social and familial ) play in the development of ones social and psychological Identity Capitalization. Parents endeavor to raise the perfect child , the Spacing one that mirrors their values and goals .But Spacing; also, make sure you are not beginning your sentences with transitory/conjunctive words such as "but," "so," or "and." many times they are startled to discover a stranger in their nest; when the child they raised is nowhere close to what they want him Is a child always male? to be. Recent research shows that nature plays a major role in the shaping of an individual rather than nurture. What research? Where is the citation? This essay will reveal how nurture Make sure you are using the right form of your words; this should be "nurturing." has only a limited impact on early phases of human development as compared to nature.
Cases where an individual turns out to be a good person in spite of tremendous environmental conditions clearly make the case for parents and other environmental factors to have relatively lesser influence on a child's growth .The Spacing. Where is the citation to support this claim? life story of the scientist George Washington Carver would be a very good example . He emerged from slavery to become one of the world's most respected and honored men .Here one asks the question of where did all the courage and strength come from to deal with such hard and terrible conditions, when there was no obvious environmental cause. This is a question, and as such, should end with a question mark. The very believable answer to this question would be that these individuals were born with it , it was in their genes . If outstanding individuals can raise poor offspring and poor parents can produce excellent offspring , differences in parenting within the normal range is unlikely to have a major effect on a child's character and personality."

One of my main concerns with this piece is that none of the research/statistics/data is cited. Where did this information come from? In order to make sure your paper is properly constructed, is credible, and is free from accusations of plagiarism, you need to make sure and properly cite the sources for your claims. Inline citations and a properly constructed bibliography will help you with this, making your paper better overall. As it is right now, there is no supporting information so it is a very weak and suspicious piece.

The grammar and mechanics of this piece do need a lot of work. A refresher course in these areas will help you polish this piece and make it easier for your reader to follow. There are many free guides that can help you online, or I suggest one of the books from the "Prentice Hall Guide for College Writers" series written by Stephen Reid. You can pick any of them up cheap used, or get them from the library. I think there are six in the series now, and any of them would help you here.

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