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"News Editors decide what to broadcast on Television" - IELTS writing


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IELTS Question :
News Editors decide what to broadcast on Television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news ? Would it better if good news reported ?

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In Early Of Twenty Century news papers were considered rich form of mass communication as well today is too. Now News are casted with with in second as it has happened. Television, Internet and Radio are common and reliable resources to broadcast all International and National News, Programmes and Topic Discussion such as " Talk Shows " to fact all types of information, news and political views.
Now a days , it has become symbol of bad news to newspapers, news channels and magazines for casting it. Political or social bodies are having massive influences to cast and to show reality .
None has desire to broadcast good news because channels may be having more critical point of view but the matter and all human condemns on casting bad or irritating news .
Some political parties or social bodies might be more conscious in the deliberation of news casting role in a society. They appreciate news casting channels and print media for forecasting the Hidden Truth, but not more bad news to cast having unconsciously and more dreadful consequences.
In Western Countries, broadcasting associations have made their news casting agencies and channels to cast social and sketching a role model news instead of bad-news that may be impacting them to wrong direction .
But In fact about bad news , always been threatening that if all are good news then who would be liable to broadcast such news whose subject is " Locale Government Performances Around The Country " which allows to analyze the "Whole Situation of The Nation " .
We should telecast and print those news which might be an important
and social role in a society or community that are not spreading disparity, diversity and some extend of provincialism across the country and also should have critical, socializing and good news that are recognizing culture and people of a country and representing them.


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Oct 20, 2010, 09:08am   #2
"In Early Of Twenty Century news papers were considered rich form of mass communication as well today is too"--
During the beginning of the 21st Century newspapers were considered as important a form of mass communication as they are today.

Now a days-nowadays
Don't capitalize the word "international, national, news, programmes or topic discussions
Oct 20, 2010, 11:55am   #3
"Now News are casted with with in second as it has happened."
I think it's better : These days, news are on air within a split second they( you have to be consistent with the subject) take place.

I think you have to work on the coherence of your essay, try to add conjunctions between sentences and paragraphs, so that your ideas would be better represented.
i think it is also suitable and you know in IELTS long sentence must have shorter but meaning full explanation ... i have an other article ...and i'll post it next day ...
thanks but can anyone guess......
how much bands i can attain?
Oct 31, 2010, 06:56am   #5
These days, news papers has been considered rich form of mass communication.

Now News are casted with with in second as it has happened.(I don't understand this mean)


Nowadays , it has become a symbol of bad news to newspapers, news channels and magazines for casting it.

Nobody desires to broadcast good news because channels may be having more critical point of view but the matter and all human condemns on casting bad or irritating news .

Some political parties or social bodies might be more conscious in the deliberation of news casting role in the society.

They appreciate news casting channels and print media for forecasting the Hidden Truth, but unpleasant news to cast having unconsciously and more dreadful consequences.

adequate vocabulary, but some grammatical mistakes.



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