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IELTS: The Natural Resistance to Changes(reason and solution)


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Apr 2, 2010, 08:04am   #
Dear EF_Friends, this is my first time to submit my essay. please give me some advices on my essay. Thank you very much for your help.

IELTS Writing Task 2.
People naturally resist making changes in their lives.
What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.


With the rapid development of economy and technology, the world looks different almost everyday. however, a vast amount of people do not choose to catch up with these variations instead of keeping their lifestyles fixed. The possible reasons and available suggestions will be identified in this argument.

first of all, the primary cause contributed to this phenomenon is habit. in other words, people are used to live in the present life. The habit imposes them to settle down. Moreover, the sense of fear to new circumstance is another reason. It is reported that 70 percent of interviewees are not adaptable to a brand-new surrounding. The most important reason, however, is laziness, human likes the other animals. is unwilling to do anything by instinct.

To change people's minds, I think that at least three methods could be performed. At the beginning, people can be informed what negative influences are emerging due to their unsuitable habits. For example, many people have given up driving to work for walking or cycling because of the environmental appeal from mass media. Secondly, it is wise that people are not only introduced how bad they were, and also how good they will be. That is to say, people should know what benefits they will receive from new circumstance and change, therefore they can have enough courage to put it into practice. Last but not least, governments and other related organizations could provide necessary support and advice to reduce people's fear of the new state.

All in all, facing the increasingly updated world, people have to make some change in some where in order to adapt to the ever-progressing world.
This is a very neat essay. And the structure of the writing seems very well down. My question is, when we write a reason-solution essay, do we have to provide solutions according to the causes we mention? For example, you mentioned laziness in the end of the second paragraph as the third causes, but you did not give relevant solutions. Do we have to? I am just confused.
The statement asks you what kind of problems this can cause, but you wrote about causes that contribute to it. I think you misundestood the question.

But in general it is well-supported and will look attractive if you change the seconf paragraph
Apr 3, 2010, 09:18am   #
Thank you for your advice. I reread the question carefully. I believe that is my neglect. I am very luck, this terrible mistake does not happen in real test.
I think to argue the effect of the phenomena, three items can be identified. Firstly, resisting change could lead to abandon by contemporary. Secondly, the gap could be formed between conservatives and reformers. Thirdly, people who refuse reform could tend to confine themselves to their own circles and shut themselves from the rest of society.
Thank you again.
I think to argue the effect of the phenomena, so that three items can be identified. Firstly, resisting change could lead to abandon by contemporary. Secondly, certain gaps could be formed between conservatives and reformers. Thirdly, people who refuse reforms could tend to confine themselves to their own circles and shut themselves from the rest of society.
Thank you again.

second and third sentences are Ok, but I had difficulties with understanting the meaning of the second one. what do you imply on by "writing resisting change could lead to abandon by contemporary"?

if you are writing about possible consequences do it in present; use can instead of could
With the rapid development of economy and technology, the world looks different almost every day. However, a vast ...

Capitalize the first letter of the sentence:
First of all, the primary cause contributing to this phenomenon is habit. In other words, people are used to living in the present life. The habit imposes compels them to settle down. Moreover, the sense of fear to about new circumstance is another reason. It is reported that....

...wise that if people are not only introduced how bad they were, and also how good they will be. That is to say, people should know what benefits they will receive from new circumstance and change. Therefore they can have enough ...

All in all, facing the increasingly updated world, people have to make some changes in some where in order to adapt to the ever-progressing world.



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