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Multi-Genre Fiction Assignment Sheet / Acceptance Letter


BlueBabey 3 / 8 2  
Jul 6, 2015   #1
Multi-Genre Fiction Assignment Sheet

Over the course of the semester we have studied a wide variety of genres. Now here is your chance to try them out for yourself!

Your fiction piece must include at least 5 genres. The genres listed below are only suggestions. There are many more that may be used. Length will vary depending on which genres you choose to include, however it will probably be at least 2 pages in length.

Topic: Write a multi-genre fiction piece about a problem a high school student may have.


Acceptance Letter

Today is a very special day. One that only occurs once every three years. It is the day that both Carmilla and her best friend Lycia will find out if they have been accepted or not. The day that they will receive a letter, informing them of whether or not they made it into the Secret Monster Species High School. The most magnificent, unparalleled school for Monsters on the planet. The school that could change both of their lives.

Carmilla Bathory never knew her parents; they died shortly after her birth, and she has been living with the Lupins' ever since. Lycia is the only daughter of Xanthus and Lenora Lupin. The Lupins' are Werewolves, but Carmilla being a Vampire, never felt or feels unwelcomed, or out of place. They have always treated her as part of the family. Carmilla does not know much about her species, and hopes that she will be able to learn more at the Secret Monster Species High School.

Carmilla does not sleep, so waiting for the letter to arrive seemed like eternity. She couldn't sit still while thinking of the highly probable outcome of being rejected by the academy. She kept worrying that not knowing her family background would be a heavy factor in the schools' decision. Carmilla is the type of being that sees the best in everyone else, and belittles her own obvious talents. Not knowing much about Monsters, or her own species, and is not aware of her obvious talent and skills, Carmilla began to walk the perimeter of the house, stressing in her silent worries.

Lycia's family has a long lineage of Secret Monster Species graduates, so Carmilla was positive that Lycia would be accepted. Lycia has also inherited the gift that runs in her family. She is a 'seer'. Her gift alone guarantees her a position in the school.

As she lapped the house, she could hear each of the Lupins' steady breathing, and an occasional snore coming from Lycia's room. The sound of them peacefully sleeping calmed her down, and she decided she would calmly wait for the letters inside. She realized she was probably overstressing, and she probably had nothing to worry about.

About an hour passes till Lycia wakes up and joins Carmilla downstairs to wait for the letters to arrive. Even though they know that the letters are going to be arriving sometime today, neither of them actually know exactly how the letters are going to arrive, or in what form they will be received in. Both of them flinch when they hear the trees rustle and the wind blow up against the house. They look at each other and giggle soft hums of laughter.

It is about seven forty-five A.M.; suddenly, both Carmilla and Lycia stiffen. One being a vampire and the other having better hearing that that of a wolf, their extremely keen, acute senses alert them of something about eight miles off in the distance. They can hear clearly, the fluttering of something flying through the trees. A steady, rhythmic beat flying closer towards the house. They have never heard any creature make sounds such as these. It is mesmerizing. So mesmerizing, that they knew. This was it. This is the moment they are waiting for; it is literally flying towards them.

" It's finally here...," Carmilla sings in a soft, nervous whisper. She reaches her hand out to Lycia's and holds it in hers, giving it a reassuring squeeze.

Lycia nods and they both walk out the door; in just three seconds, they reach the back door. They walk out to the yard and face in the direction of the movement. Waiting for the creature to arrive, they listen to the wind being beaten down on; the beautiful, tranquil whooshing of what must be its wings. Whatever it is, it is getting louder; the trees are rustling, sending the birds and animals scattering.

Distracted by the contents of the letters, neither of the girls noticed that the rest of the family had woken up and gathered by the back-door. Xanthus and Lenora, failing at holding back on their smile, were making it obvious that they knew what was heading towards them. Having both graduated from the S.M.S. Academy, they are just as excited, if not more, for the contents of the letters to arrive. Lycia's oldest brother, Zeke, was indifferent. He seemed to think it was obvious that they would both be accepted.

Only moments pass when the creature glides to a landing a few yards away from where Carmilla and Lycia were standing. It looks like a bird, only it was about 12 feet high, with a wing span of about three times its height. It had a thick cylindrical object in its claws. It kind of looks like a scroll of sorts. It is white with gold knobs at the ends.

Lycia stares at the creature with her mouth gaping. Her father, Xanthus, walks over and puts his rather large hand on her shoulder and laughs. His deep roar of a laugh, brought Lycia back to the moment. She closes her mouth and smiled a nervous smile.

Carmilla was mesmerized by the beautiful creature. Without realizing what she was doing, she began to slowly walk towards it. The Lupins' watched and she proceeded to advance towards the giant bird. Her hand reaches out like she is under a spell of sorts. The bird straightens out and begins to observe, as Carmilla makes her way. The bird appears to be very bright, or rather wise. It almost seems as if it is eager for her to reach it. She is only a few feet away now, when the bird raises the scroll and bows. Lycia's mother and father look at each other and shrug. This is new to them. When they received their letters, it didn't happen like this. The bird came, dropped the scroll, and flew off once they read it. It was indifferent when it had come to deliver the letters to them at their time of acceptance into the academy. They are assuming it is because both Lycia and Carmilla are getting their letters at the same time, but it still does not explain the fondness it is showing towards Carmilla.

Carmilla is standing directly in front of the bird now, and she can hear a beautiful lull coming from its chest. She is beginning to process what she had just done, and she freezes up. The bird raises its small head and cocks it to the right, staring at her, waiting for her to grab the scroll. When her eyes meet the birds, she suddenly feels warm, and happy. All her stress and nervousness disappears. She somehow understands what the bird wants and she grabs the scroll.

Carmilla begins to open the scroll, when she is suddenly blinded by a bright flash of light. Her sensitive eyes takes a few minutes to adjust before she tries again. The light is softer now, but it is blank. There are no words. She turns her head to look at Mr. Lupin, "What do I do now?" she asks him. He does not say anything. He just smiles his big toothy smile. He points at the scroll, raising his eyebrows and he smirks. She looks back at the scroll and words begin to be inscribed.

Dear Ms. Bathory,
We, of the Secret Monster Species High School, are delighted to inform you of your acceptance into Secret Monster Species High! We are looking forward to the incredible privilege of teaching someone of such rare lineage, such as yourself! Your thirst for knowledge intrigues us. We have high expectations. Your dorm room is prepared and ready for you.

Congratulations! You have been accepted!
We are awaiting your arrival! Don't keep
Us waiting too long!

Sincerely,
Selene Semele


As Carmilla reads the letter, she begins to cry. Her vision is getting blurry, and she laughs an awkward laugh. Everyone looks at her and howls, "Congratulations Milly!" They all rush over and hug her all at once almost toppling over.

Carmilla glances at the scroll again and a new message begins to appear.

What are you waiting for? Give the scroll to Lycia, you fool.

Stunned by what she just read, she weaves her hand through the pile of Lupins' and hands the scroll over to Lycia. The Lupins' begin to crawl off of Carmilla as they wait for Lycia's reaction. Lycia reads the scroll, and everyone begins to shout as she raises her hand in the air and winks at everyone confirming her acceptance.

The bird walks over to Carmilla, and nudges its head against her hand. Carmilla smiles, and caresses the bird's small beak. She smiles and nods as she understands that it is time for it to head back to the academy. She doesn't know why, but she feels a strong connection with him. Everybody watches as the giant bird takes off. Once the bird is no longer within the range of their vision, the head inside.

Both girls have been accepted into Secret Monster Species High School. Xanthus and Lenora congratulate both of the girls. Lenora looks at them both, and she says excitedly, "I just knew that the both of you were going to get in! I prepared gifts."



Any thoughts would be greatly appreciated. I tried to stay in present tense, and I think I corrected everything, but if you see something let me know please! :)

I hope you enjoyed reading it!!!
ChristineB - / 108 55  
Jul 9, 2015   #2
Hi, BlueBabey. You have excellent writing skills! I'll just help you with a few things at the beginning of your paper.

Today is a very special day. One that only occurs once every three years. It is the day that both Carmilla and her best friend Lycia will find out if they have been accepted or not.

I'm going to recommend some ellipses (...) here. I sense that you are building suspense, and find that ellipses do a great job of conveying suspense without "violating" regular grammar rules. So, let's try this:

Today is a very special day... One that only occurs once every three years. It is the day that both Carmilla and her best friend Lycia will find out if they have been accepted or not.

The day that they will receive a letter, informing them of whether or not they made it into the Secret Monster Species High School. The most magnificent, unparalleled school for Monsters on the planet. The school that could change both of their lives.

My suggestion for this part is to avoid "day" since you've already built up suspense around the word "day." If I were writing this, I'd say it like this:

The day that they will receive a letter, informing them of whether or not theyThey will finally receive the highly anticipated letter letting them know if they made it into the Secret Monster Species High School,Thethe most magnificent, unparalleled school for Monsters on the planet. This isThethe school that could change both of their lives.

Bathory never knew her parents; they died shortly after her birth, and she has been living with the Lupins' ever since. Lycia is the only daughter of Xanthus and Lenora Lupin. The Lupins' are Werewolves, but Carmilla being a Vampire, never felt or feels unwelcomed, or out of place. They have always treated her as part of the family. Carmilla does not know much about her species, and hopes that she will be able to learn more at the Secret Monster Species High School.

First of all, bravo for using the semicolon here...I have to confess, I love semicolons! My suggestions for this section are related to punctuation and grammar:

Bathory never knew her parents; they died shortly after her birth., andSheshe has been living with the Lupins' ever since. Lycia is the only daughter of Xanthus and Lenora Lupin. The Lupins' are Werewolves, but Carmilla, being a Vampire, never felt or feels unwelcomed, or out of place. They have always treated her as part of the family. Carmilla does not know much about her species, and hopes that she will be able to learn more at the Secret Monster Species High School.

I hope this has helped you a little :)
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jul 15, 2015   #3
Bluebabey, the story is actually quiet fascinating and entertaining, as I read along, I say kudos to your punctuation marks,it is rare that a writer would actually consider the importance of this little details that makes up the entire article more meaningful.

Now, I will work on the part of the story that needs enhancement;

- Carmilla does notcan't sleep,
- so waiting for the letter to arrivethis prolonged her agony and it seemed like eternity.
- About an hour passes tilland Lycia wakes up...
-..."I just knew that the both of you were going to get in! I prepared gifts."

There you have it, very minor remarks from me, the story is tastefully done and your writing style is already good.
OP BlueBabey 3 / 8 2  
Jul 15, 2015   #4
@ChristineB & @ Justivy03

I am so thankful for your feedback. I have worked on and applied your suggestions to my essay. I have to write a 2 to 6 page short story essay for my class, and am hoping my teacher will allow me to write a continuation of this story for the assignment.

Even if she doesn't, I am considering writing more to it for personal pleasure.

I hope you both will want to read it if I post it :)

Again, thank you both. I am elated that you both enjoyed my story! <3


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