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Aug 15, 2009, 12:36am   #1
How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons
and specific examples to support your answer.

Movies or television now play an important role in our life. Many people consider these things as part of their life, that mean they even can not live without them. Do movies or television have any influences on our behavior? The answer is yes.
First of all, People often use movies or television for relaxing after a hard day at school or work. For example, my mother usually feel very tired after 8 hours working at her company; as time like that, she always lay on the sofa watching movies or other programs on television. In this way, movies or television help movies fresh her mind, release stress. If she do not taking any short rest watching movies, she will blame me for everything wrong.
Secondly, movies or television with their programs have been helping us keep up with news on daily life. This thing has a direct influence on our behavior. After a hurricane, for instance, TV often report news on its program; from this we will know the results of this disaster, we feel sorry, compassionate for the victims of catastrophic weather. This help us realize that we are happy than other and we need to do something good for less fortuner. We will become less cruel, will feel life more meaningful.
Nevertheless, if we use movies or television unwisely, they can turn to harmful and children will be the first victims. Watching violent film or sex movies will damage children's behavior. Children's mind is blank, they will learn and act the same what they see. Gun will be considered a good tool and playing with gun is a useful game if children watch too much action movies without any observation.
In conclusion, movies or television both influence on our behavior in many ways. The important thing is we have to know how to use they wisely, especially parents must monitor what their kids watching and they need to save their business time in order to watching movies together with children.

Is the second paragrap wrong when i did not meation behavior in this? How can i change?

dhanh90:
Secondly, movies or television with their programs have been helping us keep up with news on daily life. This thing has a direct influence on our behavior. After a hurricane, for instance, TV often report news on its program; from this we will know the results of this disaster, we feel sorry, compassionate for the victims of catastrophic weather. This help us realize that we are happy than other and we need to do something good for less fortuner. We will become less cruel, will feel life more meaningful.

Really? I do not find that natural disasters make me more pleasant.
dhanh90:
Many people consider these things as part of their life, that mean they even can not live without them.

Just because these things are part of their life does not mean that they cannot live without them.

dhanh90:
Nevertheless, if we use movies or television unwisely, they can turn to harmful and children will be the first victims. Watching violent film or sex movies will damage children's behavior. Children's mind is blank, they will learn and act the same what they see. Gun will be considered a good tool and playing with gun is a useful game if children watch too much action movies without any observation.

How old are these children you speak of. This is very controversial, an example would be nice.
Aug 15, 2009, 08:34am   #3
Thank you Llamapoop123, natural disasters help us realize that we are happy than many people.so our behaviors will change about life, we less cruel?? is it right? my explanation is vague?
+"that mean they even can not live without them" may i change to "and they can not exist without them???"
+Children is always less then 10 years old:D..i think so.
Aug 15, 2009, 12:09pm   #4
This is interesting, a topic in which drawing on your own personal experiences might be better than more objective examples. After all, surely you must watch television yourself. So, how has it influenced your behavior? Has it made you more relaxed and pleasanter, or has it convinced to go out on a homicidal shooting spree? Why not talk about what you know about he subject from firsthand experience?
dhanh90:
+"that mean they even can not live without them" may i change to "and they can not exist without them???"

These two phrases are basically the same thing. Both of them are untrue. I doubt that many people couldn't live anymore if T.Vs were taken out of their lives.
Aug 15, 2009, 10:26pm   #6
It is because they think that TV plays an very important role in their life. Of course, without TV they still exist but pessimisticly, how can they believe that?
IS this ok with Second paragraph?
Aug 15, 2009, 10:55pm   #7
dhanh90:
any people consider these things as part of their life, that mean they even can not live without them.


This is of course hyperbole, which is a valid rhetorical technique. That said, the entire sentence is sort of vague and doesn't really help your essay much. If you want to provide this sort of background info in your intro, why not provide some statistics about how much time people actually spend, on average, watching television? Of course, you wouldn't be able to do that sort of research on the TOEFL test, but that would be the obvious approach for a real essay.
Aug 18, 2009, 09:06am   #9
Many people consider these things as parts of their life, which means that they even can not live without them.
Aug 20, 2009, 09:46am   #10
I think the second paragraph is a little bit abrupt. Some transition will be better.
Aug 21, 2009, 03:51am   #11
that mean they even can not live without them. Do movies or television have any influences on our behavior? The answer is yes.

I think you should revise this sentence.
Sep 2, 2009, 10:44am   #12
I wonder if I can take the character in Asia "Vuong CHieu Quan" as an example in the essay? It is the third paragraph about the topic:


How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons
and specific examples to support your answer.
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Moreover, we are likely to speak like famous people. For example, after watching the film "Vuong Chieu Quan", I would like to imitate the main character, Vuong Chieu Quan, especially in the way she answered to the king's question: "Who are the people you hate most?". She said: "I hate no one". That is an interesting question from a well-natured person. I admire her so much and if anyone ask me the same question like that , I would answer like her.
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(I have three ideas
(1)
Movies or television influence people's way of dressing
(2)
we are likely to speak like famous people.
(3)
television or movies have great influence on the way people act and react.
Sep 2, 2009, 09:11pm   #13
sung_tung:
I wonder if I can take the character in Asia "Vuong CHieu Quan" as an example in the essay?

It all depends on whether your readers are likely to recognize this character and, if not, how much space you will need to use to explain her before making your point. If you need to give too much explanation, doing so will detract from the flow of your essay.



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