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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work (job satisfaction)


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Jun 15, 2010, 02:49am   #
Topic : As most people spend a major part of their adult life,job satisfaction is an imporant element of individual wellbeing. what factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

Life has diffrent stages like childhood, teenager,adulthood,old age. adult life is a time when a person has more ability to do a work than an older person. It is not wrong to say that most people spend a major part of their adult life at work.

Adulthood age encourage adults to make their future secure. This is the only reason for which they spend their time at work. At this stage of life people has more ability to achieve something for bright future.

job satisfaction is very much important factor of individual wellbeing. Every person has a right to have self respect. An emplee is a social being he always want self respect. job satisfaction can ensure through good working condition and self respect. A company should provide healthy and safe environment. workers should allow to give feedback realted to company important desicions because they are also a part of the company. This can ensure that they are play an important role in the company.

job satisfaction is reaistic for all workers because without good working environment no one would agree to work with an organisation which is not providing good environment . No doubt money play an important role in everyone life but job satisfaction is also a part of this. for example; A company pay more salary than another one but treatment with workers harshly. the workers may give first prefrence to work with company which satisfy their needs either their salary is low.

According to my point of view self satisfaction is more important than money . if a worker get good amount of money but he do not have job satisfaction he would not work so long with that company.
Jun 15, 2010, 03:14am   #
Life has different stages likesuch as childhood, teenagerthe teenage years,adulthood, andold age. adult lifeAdulthood is athe time when a person has more ability to do a work than an older person.(This sentence appears to be irrelevant. Old age is still considered part of adulthood, in addition what does this sentence have to do with the prompt?) It is not wrong to say that most people spend a major part of their adult life at work.(You need to create a better thesis statement. All you've done is restate the prompt)

Adulthood age encourages adults to make their future secure. This is the only reason for whichwhy they spend their time at work. At this stage of life people hashave more ability to achieve something for abrighter future.(This paragraph would make a much better introduction paragraph than your first one)

job satisfaction is a very much important factor of individual well being. Every person has a right to have self respect. An employee is a social being he always want who always wants self respect.(What does a social being have to do with wanting self respect?) job satisfaction can be ensured through good working conditions and self respect. A company should provide a healthy and safe environment. workers should be allowed to give feedback related to company important decisionimportant company decisionss because they are also a part of the company. This can ensure that they are play an important role in the company.

job satisfaction is realistic for all workers because without good working environments no one would agree to work with an organization which is not providing a good environment . No doubt money plays an important role in everyone's life but job satisfaction is also a part of this. For example, a company may pay more salary than another one but treats workers harshly. the workers may give first preferenceprefer to work with company which satisfy their needs eitheralthough their salary is low.

According to my point of view self job satisfaction is more important than money . if a worker gets a good amount of money but he does not have job satisfaction he would not work so long with that company.



Although you answered the part about what factors contribute to self satisfaction, I would suggest that you provide stronger and more clear opinion on how realistic it is. Also, watch out for your verb-noun, plural-singular agreement.
Name_Here did a great thing here, like usual. I know how tedious it is to make those corrections, so... thanks!!

Inderjeet, you have a nice way of writing, and the mistakes are not bad mistakes. Do you know WHY all the corrections were made? I wonder if you have questions.

In this sentence, a good word is various:
Life has diffrent various stages, like ...

and another good word for the 'teenage years' is adolescence:
... childhood, teenager adolescence, ...

and ue the word "and" before the last word in a list like this one:
...adulthood, and old age.

Use capital letters to start your sentences:
adult Adult life is a time when a person ...

:-)



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