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IELTS ; MOBILE PHONES - Essential or Unnecessary?


sally12390 2 / 4 2  
Jun 27, 2013   #1
many young people today have their own mobile phones and believe it is essential to their lives.other people dislike mobile dislike mobile phones and think that they are both a nuisance and an unnecessary luxury item.to what extent do you agree or diagree with these two points of view? its seems to me that these days is the technology day's . the mobile phone outweighed all other items because nowadays, each person in his family own his own mobile phone . alot of people think that mobile phones is very important to their lives other people disagree with them and consider them unnecessary. i personally agree that mobile phones are very important and we can't live without them . they are small easy to carry arround in case of emergency situations and u needed to call the police for instance.as well as , peole can also use mobile phones to take photographs , to use an alarm clock, to see the neww, to listen to music and download videos as well as games also people can use them 24 hours and stay in touch with thier friends from all over the world on the other hand, other people think that they are nuisance items because they dirturb them while sleeping or in classes howvever, peole consider them harmful because alot of scientists proved that talking in the mobile phone or putting it next to your head before you sleep damages the brain and may cause brain cancer it also can damage the eye if you use it too much.furthermore,some farmers are complanning about losing their bees .scientists are blamming the mobile phones because of that .saying that the bees are loosing their way back. scientist discovered that the beess have inside of them somthing like the gps that tells them their way back and the radiation that are caused because of the mobile phones are ruining them making them lose their way back.in addition to that mobile phones somtimes takes our attention from things that we should do with great care such as driving a car . taking al the points above into consideration although the mobile phones are considered harmful but I agree that they are very impotant in emergency situations or if you wanted to call someone to tell him somthing urgent happend with you.
rozha 15 / 34  
Jun 27, 2013   #2
each person in his family own his own mobile phone ? ...nowdays, each member of our family has own mobile phone.
jkjeremy - / 380 72  
Jun 27, 2013   #3
If at all possible, you need to postpone this test. You simply aren't ready for it.

You'll need an extended period of fairly intensive teaching, study, and practice.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 27, 2013   #4
It seems you are new to this forum. Please select the forum "writing feedback" for your essays written on IELTS tasks. Also provide a meaningful topic in the Subject field when you open a new thread. These practices will help you earn good feed backs for your essays.

Now regarding your essay, as others suggest you need to improve a lot. First, I wish to stress a very basic point. Your essay looks so messy. It's always good to present a neat and tidy essay to your examiner. Start sentences with capital letters and separate paragraphs.


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