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For me meeting Lionel Messi is preferable than to come across other athletes


Fardin 6 / 14  
Mar 29, 2013   #1
hi i will be glad if you help me and revise my essay!!!

If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

If I could meet a famous athlete certainly my choice would be lionel Messi .Messi is one of the most famous football players in the world .he is originally from Argentina but now lives in Spain and plays for Barcelona football team . I like to meet him because he has been world's best football player for several years , indeed he is world's most expensive football player and so rich.

Messi is genius football player ,he is creative and hardworking because of these he is able to obtain a lots of awards , awards like a variety of cups in several league with his teams , or several personal award's like being world's best football player and achieving "the Gold Ball" or achieving "the Golden Shoe" and many other merits .because of these every one admire him and me admire him too.

Furthermore he is most expensive football player in the world and it shows his value .I am convinced to meet world's most valuable athlete .it is unbelievable feel and I like experience it and ask him about keys of success .

It seems to me that meeting Lionel Messi is Preferable than other athletes .he is my favorite football player due to he is world's best football player and furthermore he is most valuable athlete in the world!
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Mar 29, 2013   #2
I like to meet him because he has been the world's best football player for several years , indeed he is the world's most expensive football player and so rich .

Messi is genius football player ,he is creative and hardworking because of these he is able to obtain a lots of awards , awards like a variety of cups in several league with his teams , or several personal award's like being world's best football player and achieving "the Gold Ball" or achieving "the Golden Shoe" and many other merits .

Messi is genius, very creative and hardworking that earned him many awards such as the World's best football player title, " the Gold Ball", " the Golden Shoe" and many other merits.

It seems to me that meeting Lionel Messi is Preferable preferable than other athletes .

It seems to me that meeting Lionel Messi would be a dream coming true.

I wish you have talked a little more about your own passion for football and the how you got attracted to the style of Messi playing. You only talk about his cleverness and riches. But, only little is said about why you think he's so important.
OP Fardin 6 / 14  
Mar 29, 2013   #3
dumi
thank u dear dumi
i try to do my best ,actually i think in this topic we should only write about that person!!
thank for your help...and what is my score in ibt scoring method?
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Mar 29, 2013   #4
actually i think in this topic we should only write about that person!!

That's correct.... you have to speak about this person more, but you need to relate all that to yourself as to show them why would choose him out of the bunch. That part seems to be missing in this writing. Had you said that Football is a major part of your life and you and you watch every match that Messy plays, then there is a link. Then you can tell why Messy's so special to you. Then your writing would be more interesting to the reader than just knowing facts of this person's life. :)


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