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Robert Pattinson is for me the best actor around the world


Mira97 1 / -  
Jan 15, 2014   #1
Entertainer has very difficult job to make people get involve with them.That may be in forms of singing,comedy and acting.If I would get an opportunity to meet a famous personality,I would choose Robert Pattinson.He is an English actor,model,musician and producer.Pattinson plays the guiter and piano,he also composes his own music.Pattinson is best-known for playing Edward Cullen in the popular Twilight films.

I want to meet him because he is my favourite actor now,but firstly when my friend had told me about Pattinson and Twilight films I had not got any interes to watch this film,but then I suddenly saw the reclam in TV about Twilight and I decided to watch this film because I was alone at home and had not got any job.I very liked Robert Pattinson and whole Twilight film.During watching the film I wanted to be a partner of Robert and I want this now too.

Robert Pattinson is for me the best actor around the world and I'm sure that every girls dream is to be a partner of Robert and my dream is this too, but at the moment I want just to mee to Robert.
lhs12 1 / 9  
Jan 16, 2014   #2
You have a lot of grammar issues and also spelling. You should run it through spell check and it will make this so much better.
something 23 / 52 5  
Jan 17, 2014   #3
There are three parts of academic writing.
-first paragraph is about introduction.
-Second is about details of subjects you want to write about.
-Last paragraph is conclusion
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jan 29, 2014   #4
This thread should have been opened in the Writing Feedback forum. According to EF rules you should open your new threads in the most appropriate essay forum and it also helps you earn more meaningful feedbacks. This has been moved from Undergraduate to Writing Feedback.

Entertainer has a very difficult job to make people get involved with them.
Entertainer's task is pretty difficult because it is not easy to make people happy and enthusiastic.

That may be in forms of singing,comedy and acting.

Be him a singer, comedian, actor or dancer, he needs to put lots of efforts and thoughts, of course together with his born talents, in performing his job.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 29, 2014   #5
I want to meet him because he is my favourite actor now,but firstly when my friend had told me about Pattinson and Twilight films I had not got any interes to watch this film,but then I suddenly saw the reclam in TV about Twilight and I decided to watch this film because I was alone at home and had not got any job

This sentence is way too long and cramped up with so many ideas. So this lacks good presentation. Make shorter sentences each having one idea per sentence. When the sentences are too long you tend to get carried away at the end of the sentence.

I very liked Robert Pattinson and whole Twilight film.

It was Robert Pattinson's acting that got me to like him and the Twilight movie.
DuringWhile watching the film I wanted to be a partner of Robert and I want this now too. ... what do you mean by this latter part?


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