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media focus too much on celebrites


valency 8 / 10  
Dec 3, 2012   #1
More and more media attention is paid to famous people. These are the people from ordinary backgrounds and become famous in music, fashion and sports. Why do you think the public is interested in the lives of famous people? Is it right for the media to put attention on lives of famous people?

Recent years have witnessed an increasing attention is given to those celebrities by the media to cater to the taste and curiosity of the public. From my perspective, such practice exerts undesirable impacts on the daily life of celebrities to a large extent.

There is no single reason has contributed to the climbing trend of excessive exposure to the lives of famous people. First and foremost, those renowned people in music, fashion and sport areas, who came from normal backgrounds, prospered through their hard-work or talents. The news arouses the interests of ordinary people who also dream to be distinguished in the future, therefore, to get an insight of the lifestyle of their idols. Apart from this, the every day lives of normal people are generally simple and dreary. Therefore, the interesting scoop about celebrities could entertain their lives.

Nevertheless, it is unethical for the media to pay too much attention to digging news about celerities, which inevitably impedes their human rights. This practice put the overall soundness of celebrities in jeopardy, in both physical and psychological. The growing incidence of celebrities' suicide served as a convicing illustration. Their death are attributed to the closely chasing of the paparazzi, who did not give them a break. In light of this, excessive reports of these famous people are considered to be wrong, as it violates the personal privacy, which is supposed to be respected and protected.

In conclusion, the reasons for the increasingly exposed the lives of celebrities are manifold. This practice has largely disturbed the lives of popular people.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Dec 3, 2012   #2
This is a very interesting topic and you have some good points.
There are a few grammar mistakes however.

These are the people from ordinary backgrounds and become famous in music, fashion and sports.

All the people who are famous in sport, music and fashion have come from ordinary backgrounds.

Is it right for the media to put attention on lives of famous people?

Is it right for the media to publicize the lives of famous people?

Recent years have witnessed an increasing attention is given to those celebrities by the media to cater to the taste and curiosity of the public.

During the last few years, the media has paid more attention on the lives of celebrities.

There is no single reason has contributed to the climbing trend of excessive exposure to the lives of famous people.

It is unclear what you are trying to say in this sentence. Better rephrase it.

The final paragraph is unclear to me.
I hope my suggestions are of use. :)
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Dec 3, 2012   #3
hai..
You have good ideas..
I feel you need little bit more organization.

Some ideas for the 1st part.

1 st question reasons..

:People are attracted towards success..
:Curiosity about- how they achieved their dream, how they are maintaing it, personal life.
:their victory is a motivation
:people want to follow it as they are ordinary people, their life style is easy to follow.


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