chasm between how food is produced and the consumer
Hi! You have a great writing style.. I will point out a possible problem here, though, and I wonder if you'll agree: This idea of a chasm cannot apply to 'how it is produced' and 'the consumer'... I think you mean to refer to how it is produced that the how consumers would like it to be produced.
I really enjoyed reading this. It gave me the insight that sweeping the dirty practices under the carpet is possible because the average consumer cannot be knowledgeable enough to see through the trickery -- so many things seem healthy and are not. And marketing is so powerful. We have a conflict of interests, because increasing the quality of food interferes with profit. Only resolute, educated consumers can ensure their own wise choices when buying food.
This sentence is not written correctly:
This class needs to exist for the very simple reason: There is so
much too ignorance about food production here in the United States.
I made a correction using a colon, and I think that is cool.
The poor are kept poor so the rich can get richer, and cheap food businesses want to sell food at the prices poor people can afford!
Well, your essay has a great quality -- it is actually interesting to read. Most academic essays are not interesting. : ) I think it will make a good impression.
***If this is supposed to reflect knowledge of specific information they expect you to research (stuff mentioned in the prompt) be sure to include information that shows you did the reading/research.