Fashion is known as the ultimate statement a person can make about herself or himself. That is why fashion designers are known world wide. They design innovative concepts and put on shows that show their vision of the future of the fashion world. While you touched on some of this aspects in your essay, it feels to me like you spent most of the essay trying to develop answers to the prompt that were never really completed. Maybe because you lost track of the prompts midstream. There is a missing component in your essay as far as I can tell. That is the final part of the prompt that asks you discuss;
where do you visualize your creative abilities and academic study to take you after your education here at Parsons?
It seems that your response to this was;
I am far from where I want to be but I am also far from where I started. Every single day is an investment for the future. I do at least one thing a day, no matter how small, that will help me to be successful. I have big ambitions and that I will never achieve if I do not work as hard as I possibly can. Studying at Parsons would help me grow immensely. During the past two summers at the summer intensive studies I was taught extremely valuable information, unlike anything i have learned before. Undoubtedly studying at parsons will take a lot of work but I am more than willing to put in the work in order to grow. Throughout my life, I never want to stop learning. Where ever I go I want to be able to have the freedom to express myself and utilize my creative abilities. I believe Parsons The New School For Design is the right choice for me because it allows me to have the freedom and the knowledge to create art that will impact the world.
You basically did not answer that part of the prompt. There are no solid plans for where you plan to take yourself after graduation. So you have no idea of what you want to achieve when that time comes. I suggest you rethink this portion of the essay and develop a more solid response. Something along the lines of "After graduating from Parson, I plan to stage a show at New York Fashion week within 2 years before having a bigger and more popular show in 3 more years during Paris Fashion Week..." or something along those lines. That is the type of definite answer that the prompt is looking for. As of now, your answer is quite vague and directionless.