There many ............... thinking,..................... freedom. YOU HAVE INCLUDE TWO IDEAS IN THE SAME SENTENCE, YOU HAVE EXPLAINED THE FIRST ONE ONLY? ASK YOURSELF IF THESE TWO GIFT HAVE RELATION WITH LOYALITY IN YOUR ESSAY . I DID NOT NOTICE THAT.
Did we keep all these gifts and used them wisely? I DIDN'T UNDERSTAND HOW TO KEEP THE GIFT OF THINKING.
No. Things that we really lose day by day are loyalty, love, and common sense. THIS REPONSENCE IS NOT APPROPRIATE TO YOU QUESTION.
But now loyalty is being sold foe (DO YOU MEAN "FOR" or "FOE")material stuff.
For example, Suzan and Hilary are best friends ( BEST FRIENDS OF WHO)since kindergarten,
Suzan and Hilary had a hard time saying goodbyes, [and Hilary has told all her secrets to Suzy, and was her only friend.]THESE TWO LAST SENTENCE SHOULD BE BEFORE GOODBYS, NO?
but she didn't ( SHE DID NOT WHAT?)her daughter.
Suzan had a hard time in school ( ITHOUGHT THAT SHE HAD HARD TIME BECAUSE OF HER MOTHER, SO PLEASE GIVE THE REASON BEFORE YOU ARGUMENT), trying to fit in. Until a bunch of girls came and gave her tips about how to dress up and so on, until she turned into a brat just like them .
They told her that she have them (I DID NOT UNDERSTAND THIS SENTENCE)
Just for material stuff, Suzan gave away her loyalty. It was lucky for her tha her - FRIEND- Hilary forgave her, even though it is almost impossible for this to happen these days.
YOU DID NOT ARGUMENT A LOT ABOUT ANIMAL, THE ESSAY SHOULD BE EQUAL BETWEEN HUMAN AND ANIMAL.
I THINK THAT YOU DID SWITCH YOU ESSAY FROM ESSAY TO A STORY. YOU DID NOT GIVE A DEFINITION TO THE LOYALTY.
SORRY, BUT I HAVE TO TELL THE TRUTH.
ALSO, YOU HAVE TO LEARN HOW TO CONNECT BETEEN IDEAS.
WHAT IS GOOD IS THER ARE NO GRAMMAR ERROR(98%) FELICITATION