Here are my suggestions:
"Love is the a beautiful feeling that expresses
honesty, affection and at the same time friendship. Around the world people are concerned about solutions for many of social problems. The feeling love could be the key for many of that problems. Although, some people do not believe that it is possible
. By beginning this sentence with "although" you lead readers to assume there will be a result at the end of this statement, but there is none. Reword this statement or provide a result.
Problems that include world hunger
and violence are some example of social matters that love could solve.
The most important reason why love could help
problem around the world is the fact that love ties people together in a way to help each other. First of all, feelings
such as caring
about others and helping each other is also included in love. What does this have to do with hunger?
Besides, someone moved by that magic feeling is
more likely to do little actions that today's are being more and more rare. This is nonsensical.
For example, to join a non-governmental
institute that helps
people with hungry
or even feeding someone who needs
food is a simple attitude
that this feeling incentive
people to do. This sentence is also nonsensical.
Secondly, the spirit of sharing is not very common
world. In fact, people tend to be more selfish and caring less about others. However, love flourish that felling
and make people more likely to share what they have. Love flourishes selfishness and caring less about others? This doesn't make sense.
For instance, sharing the half a lunch
with someone who does not
have or even giving a piece of a fruit are attitudes
that people moved by love often do. Therefore, love incentive Do you mean "motivates?" people help solve social
problems, as hungry
, which is just by us and we don't realize. This sentence is nonsensical.
Another important social
matter that love could help to solve is the violence. It is undeniable that the first
thing to associate with love is peace. First, that fantastic feeling attracts
people around with a peaceful sentiment. For example, starting a fight or thinking of taking someone's
life are thoughts that do not exist when one's are contagious by love. This doesn't make sense.
Currently, the world is
moved by ambition, revenge,
and meanness. Usually when you read or watch some news the fisrt headlight Do you mean "headline?"
that appears is about war, murder ,
or people being killed and there are anywhere to be safe. This doesn't make sense.
As an example, a 20 year
old student has been killed in Alberta, Canada by a lost bullet two months ago. Actions like that could be
avoided when love is surrounding people lives.
In conclusion, Love This shouldn't be capitalized.
answer for most of the world's
. It is a necessary feeling in life because it is wonderful and magic. Also, it holds
people together in way to help and care about each other
I suggest running this piece through a spell checking program as there were many spelling and grammatical mistakes that could easily be caught in a program such as Word or the Mozilla browser.
Also, there are many sections here that just don't make sense. Go back through, take your time, and clarify these pieces. The above mentioned programs may be able to help you there as well.