It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.
In this day and age, it is almost impossible to withdraw from the effects of media in our daily activities. As a coin always has two sides, there are also several positive and negative effects of living in the exposure of media. Despite of the drawbacks, I am convinced that media benefits humanity.
The most prominent advantage of the media in our lives is it enables information to travel in a blink of an eye. As a result, people can keep up-to-date and take necessary actions afterwards. For instance, when a tsunami hit Aceh region in Indonesia during the last decade, the media provided breaking news concerning the victims and how the area was damaged. Subsequently, people around the globe collected donations as well as volunteered in order to help the recovery after the disaster. From this experience, the media enables mankind to ease sufferings in the world.
Another advantage is the media industry creates job opportunities due to the growing number of mass media companies. As a matter of fact, Manpower Department of Indonesia recently reports that there are more than 1 million people who work in this industry. Moreover, this particular industry ranks the third in terms of the number of employees among the others. Hence, a media-rich society offers significant employment chances.
However, the media tends to report violent and sensational crime stories with the aim of increasing their audience. It results in fear of crime among society. In fact, Indonesia's Censoring Institution points out in 2011 that 70% of news programs were related to criminal cases. Thus, people live in anxiety of being a criminal victim who will end up in one of the news feature.
All in all, it is evident that living in a media-rich society has more advantages than disadvantages. Where possible, media should contribute more for humanity in the future.
- In this day and ageIn this generation , it is almost impossible to withdraw from the effects of media in our daily activities.
- Another advantage is the media industry creates job opportunities due towith the growing number of mass media companies.
- All in allOverall , it is evident that living in a media-rich society has more advantages than disadvantages. Where possible, media should contribute more for humanity in the future.
Trias, it's another good essay. However I would like to add the following sentences.
Following your last sentence, kindly allow the following sentences;
Media should be more responsible when it comes to spreading news, being in the media is one serious business. It's not just a career or a profession, it's a responsibility that one should take ought and take seriously. Media has a lot of hands, ready to reach the public that will hear and understand what they are about to air, it has major effects, positive and negative it's the medias effect. Although the public has the same responsibility of taking the media, personally, I think the media need to take control more than any other parties. A society with no healthy information from the lacks a huge chunk of the world of information.
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I added a few of the sentences as I thought your essay is a little bit short than usual.
Also, mind your word choice, this will ensure that your readers understand and will keep reading your essay 'till the end.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!
I have provided some changes for you to consider. Everything is well organized, but there are some slight changes that need to be made. The changes are in order by paragraph.
-The opening of this essay is good. The illustration about the coins is very interesting and relates to the positive and negative effects of media. However, at the end this sentence, I think you are really stating: "of being exposed to media." In the next sentence, you can delete "the" before drawbacks and add "the" after that.
-You were almost correct with this common expression, but it is really: "in the blink of an eye". Do you mean people can keep up to date with news? Place "the" before Aceh. The next sentence, place "in" after help to discuss this recovery.
-Place "that" before the in the first sentence. Give credit to your source in this paper. Did you find the information in a book, website, etc? Example of how to give credit to a website source: (Title, Date) after quoted material.
