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Living in a big city has various advantages for people


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Hi everyone this is my essay that I have to write for my english writing skill class.
Thank you very much for your help

Living in a big city has various advantages for people of every generation.
An advantage for teenagers who live in a larger city is for instance that they
have several possibilities to entertain themselves or with their friends during the
week.
For example if a teenager lives in a populated city and wants to go out at night,
the next bar or club are mostly not more than 30 minutes away.
Another advantage is that teenagers don't need to drive to another city to meet their
friends, like a lot young adults need to if they come from the countryside. Because
of the fact that teenagers normally live close by the school they go to, their friends from
school normally live not far away from one's own home.

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Living in a big city has various advantages for people of every generation.
An advantage for teenagers who live in a larger city is that they (take out for instance)[/font] have several possibilities to entertain themselves [font#FF0000]either alone,or with their friends during the week.
For example if a teenager lives in a populated city and wants to go out at night,
the next bar or club is mostly less than than 30 minutes away.

(Take out "But") living in a big city does not only have advantages for teenagers, there are also several benefits for elderly people.
Because a lot of senior citizens do not attemptto drive anymore, they have issues grocery shopping if there is no grocery store close to their homes. In a big city there is at least one store close to every home which has all the supplies you need for a living.

Senior citizens can either take a bus, drive with a street car or otherwise take a cab which will be at one's
home in less than 10 minutes.

First of all, the cultural opportunities are enourmous. For example, the world's famous
musicians are always touring to the most populated cities in the world which leaves their
citizens to enjoy their favourite artists in a live concert.

Another cultural benefit is all the different restaurants which offer food from all over the world.
People can enjoy food from a country that they never have been too and do not even
need to leave the house because many [/font]restaurants [font#FF0000]servetheir food to the people's home.

In conclusion, living in a city has several adavantages for people of every generation.
It makes life (take out "more") easier for the senior population and gives teenagers plenty of options to amuse themselves.
Here is my reservation. I have been successful in several AP english classes so i feel these changes will be helpful for you.

Living in a big city has several advantages for people of every generation from teenagers to the elderly.
Teenagers enjoy the many advantages available to them through living in a big city environment. An advantage for teenagers who live in a larger city is that they
have several possibilities to entertain themselves and their friends during the
week. For example, if a teenager lives in a populated city and wants to go out at night,
the hottest bar or club is most likely only a couple blocks away. Another advantage is that teenagers don't need to drive far to meet their friends, like people who do not have the convenience of living so close to their friends. Because teenagers normally live close by the school they go to, their friends from school normally live not far away from one's own home.
Living in a big city, however, does not only have advantages for teenagers, there are also several benefits for elderly people. Due to the fact that a lot of senior citizens do not attempt to drive anymore, they have issues going grocery shopping if there is no grocery store close to their home. In a big city, there is at least one store close to every home which has all the supplies one would need to live. Furthermore, it is not very difficult for elderly people to get to these stores, due to the several different public transportation options that a big city contains. Senior citizens could take a bus, drive with a street car or otherwise take a cab which could be at one's home in less than 10 minutes.
There are also several advantages of a big city which favor citizens of every generation.
First of all the cultural opportunities are enormous. For example the world's famous
musicians are always touring the most populated cities in the world, which provides an opportunity for their citizens to enjoy their favorite artists in a live concert. Another cultural benefit is all the different restaurants which offer food from all over the world. People can enjoy food from a country that they never have been too and do not even need to leave the house because of the fact that restaurants deliver their food to the people's home.

As a conclusion, living in a city has several advantages for people of every generation.
It makes life easier for the senior population and gives young teenagers plenty of
options to amuse themselves.
jennay99:
Here is my reservation.

Reservation does not mean what you think it means. :-) Google it!

At some point during this essay, the writer should try to sum up the main idea of the essay in a single sentence.

People can enjoy food from a country to which they have never been, that they never have been too and and they do not even need to leave the house because of the fact that restaurants deliver their food to the people's homes.

:-)



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