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Living for today is better than living for tomorrow


Naph 9 / 17 6  
May 19, 2015   #1
I am ready to TOEFL examination, I need you help me.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Living for today is better than living for tomorrow.


The maxim "living for today is better than living for tomorrow" I believe, has an inherent truth in itself, in as such that it refers to as a means living today, stop living in the past and do not worry about tomorrow because I cannot change them. I live for today that thing has happening in these days not for the future; which I consider as being universal in scape.

Personally, I believe that such a maxim can be applied in situations in which opposite attitude to have in times of stress for the future. This I suppose can be best illustrated by I do not take the chance to alive forever that I could love other, helped to someone and do things today in case there is no tomorrow. Another point worth mentioning is I live with people that I very like them, as in the case of maybe I or they do not lives for a long time; in addition, I missed the chance for live tougher by peace and calm and this regrettable me. What's more, I think In hope to be happy about something in the future, instead of happy for now, I am missing out, like when I often want more time, more money for that new acquire, a better job, better health and the list may be long time. Finally, I would like to wrap up by saying that this maxim is applicable in situations where I do not worry about things that do not have information, for example, I am only sure of today and do not back on past I just look at it without change.

It is based on the above mentioned reasons that I would like to reiterate that I believe the maxim living for today is better than living for tomorrow to be universally true.
lcturn87 - / 435 236  
May 19, 2015   #2
I have given you some information to help you. You can see that my questions will help you as you revise your paper. There was some information that was confusing, but I think you will be able to make the changes.

I think the opening sentence can be quite confusing. I think you mean that you have to stop living in the past and don't worry about tomorrow, because you can only live in the present. Is this correct? You agree that living for today is better than living for tomorrow. You should simply state, "Therefore, I believe that living for today is better than living for tomorrow."

This next paragraph is rather confusing. Let me summarize what I think you are trying to express. You feel that "living for today" can help when one stresses about the future. Do you love and help others in case there is no tomorrow? Sometimes, we say, "do not take the ones you love for granted".

Do you live with others whom you enjoy being around to avoid stress and have a peaceful and calmer life?

If you think about things for the future, then it changes the way you feel about living for today. I think you mean that you won't dwell or think about past regrets if you live for today. A way to put information in a series is to list it this way:

Ex: I would like to acquire a better job, have better health, and more time with my friends, etc.

I think you were trying to form a sentence but you were uncertain so you stated, 'the list may be a long time". You can use (etc) to show that there maybe more information.

When you use finally, you are ending the sentence. You don't have to state you are wrapping up. "Finally, I would like to wrap up by saying that this maxim is..."

I'm unsure what you mean when you say that you don't worry about things that you do not have information. Do you mean you don't worry about what you can't control because you live in the present?

"...I believe the maxim living for today, is universally true rather than living for tomorrow."
Trias 23 / 41 14  
May 23, 2015   #3
Hi, I have some suggestions for your consideration:

The maxim "living for today is better than living for tomorrow" I believe, has an inherent truth in itself, into be undeniably true as such that it refers to as a means living todayit reminds us to live fully at the present time , stop living in the past and do not to worry about tomorrow because I cannot change themas it has not occured yet .

It will be better if you position this maxim as a saying or people's common thought at the beginning, then vary it as maxim, proverb, or words of wisdom . By showing your wide range of vocabulary, you have a chance to attain a greater test result.
Hettymsk 9 / 9 9  
May 24, 2015   #4
Hello @Naph!

I am going to give you some suggestions regarding your essay:

1) So it's again about the parts of essay. you have to separate essay into 4 main paragraphs just like I suggested you earlier.

2) In the concluding para, you have to restate the thesis statement and your own opinion. So that the examiner know where is your position whether you are in the agreement or disagreement to given topic.
OP Naph 9 / 17 6  
May 26, 2015   #5
Hello dear
can u help me for TOEFL essay?
Can you tell me your advise by example

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Living for today is better than living for tomorrow.

The maxim "living for today is better than living for tomorrow" I believe, has an inherent truth in itself, it reminds us to live fully at the present time, stop living in the past and not to worry about tomorrow as it has not occurred yet. I live for today that thing has happening in these days not for the future; which I consider as being universal in scape.

(...) Next paragraph the same like in the first post

It is based on the above mentioned reasons that I would like to reiterate that I believe the maxim living for today is better than living for tomorrow to be universally true and I agree with.

thanks a lot


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