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ESSAY: Is life better in a city or in a small town?


Billabongfox 1 / 1  
Aug 28, 2012   #1
Topic: Is life better in a city or in a small town? Explain your point of view in an essay. Use your personal observations, experience, and knowledge to support your view.

Even though I have never lived in a city, I think life is better in a small town because the community is close knit. Small towns have less crime and less traffic as well.

In a small town everybody seems to know each other. Strangers smile at you when you pass them in public. It also seems like people in small towns are more willing to reach out and help you when you are in need.

Cities seem to have a lot of crime and in small towns crime is very low. You don't have to worry about locking doors or closing windows and you are less likely to get mugged or robbed. Children are also safe walking to school alone or playing outside with little or no supervision.

Traffic is another great thing about living in a small town. It takes less time to drive from one end of town to the other than it does in the city. You also don't have to wait very long at intersections or spend much time searching for a free parking spot.

Even though I think life is better in a small town with less crime, less traffic and a close knit community, I would still like to explore the city. It could be fun to live in a new environment.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Aug 28, 2012   #2
Cities seem to have a lot of crime and in small towns crime rate is very lowfairly lower.

I did this change in view of highlighting the contrast because the topic expects you to contarst the two extremes.

Free from traffic jamsTraffic is another great thing about living in a small town.

Even though I think life is better in a small town with less crime, less traffic and a close knit community, I would still like to explore the city. It could be fun to live in a new environment.

Your conclusion sounds somewhat controversial. In the beggining of your essay, you support the living in a small town and you conclude your essay by indicating your preference for living in a big city. If you change the order of the two sentences, then it may sound more logical :)You have written a simple, but very interesting essay. Good grammer, vocabulary and of course very good presentation :)
amitt - / 80  
Aug 28, 2012   #3
This is really very nice topic, you can write a whole bible on this issue. Tonight I will give my own views
Regards
As
christyzhongs 7 / 21 1  
Aug 28, 2012   #4
Well, very good, like reading a poem, I can image the beautiful scenes during my reading.
amitt - / 80  
Aug 28, 2012   #5
Like Dumi i am also confused whether she like small town or big city. After just one or two disadvantages of living in big city she should start explain why she likes big cities. She should go in more scientific manner & exmples are utmost important to support your views. Air/noise/water pollution are three major issues she should mention. Inspite of there is heavy traffic but cities are so much well planned we can reach our destinations in stipulated time(metro trains/helpline buses/city buses. Help/support centers are available (24x7).Education/career oppurtunities/entertainment(multiplex/cinema halls)/job prospects/media attention/experince in living in cosmopolitan status make person more smart/hospitals/fast life/solutions to our querries etc.

We can go beyond any one's imaginations for example millionairs/big business flourish only in big cities. Etc.

Thanks
OP Billabongfox 1 / 1  
Aug 29, 2012   #6
Thank you for all of your ideas and suggestions! All of your input has helped me and I appreciate it. I meant in my essay to explain that even though I think living in a small town is better I would still like to venture out and try living in the big city to see what it is like. I think it could be a fun and new experience for me. But thank you to all who have given their point of views! :)


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