The levels of movie rentals and sales in VHS, DVD and Blu-ray formats

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the levels of movie rentals and sales (in VHS, DVD and Blu-ray formats) in one specific store during the period 2002-2011. The most significant facts to emerge are movie rentals and VHS sales slowly fell, while the number of movies which sold in DVD and Blu-ray formats were bouncing and continuously rose respectively over the timeframe.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, the rentals of films stood at above 180,000 in 2002, after that, there was a gradual decrease in the number of film rentals until it reached a low of around 55,000 in 2011. Likewise, movies sales in VHS format slightly declined from 2002 to 2006 when it finally plunged to the big zero in 2006. The level of sales in this particular format remained constant until it the end of period.

On the other hand, movies which sold in DVD and Blu-ray formats had different trend in same whole period. 2002 to 2004 witnessed a sudden jump, followed by a small grow from 2005 until it peaked at above 210,000 in 2007. Subsequently, there was a slight fall until 2011. Lastly, Blu-ray format just began to be sold in 2007, and then it gradually grew until 2011.

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- Likewise, moviesmovie sales in VHS format slightly declined from 2002 to 2006 when it finally plunged to the big zero in 2006.

- The level of sales in this particular format remained constant until it the end of the period.

- On the other hand, movies which were sold in DVD and Blu-ray formats had different trend in same whole period.

- 2002 to 2004 witnessed a sudden jump, followed by a small growgrowth from 2005 until it peaked at above 210,000 in 2007.

Trias, once again, another good article from you. Your analysis has been great and you were very detailed. Minor set backs here and there as I will state below;

- Proof read as always

- singular and plural form of words, "movies sales", your referring to movies as your subject and its collective, use the singular form.

Keep writing

Cheers!!!

Actually your essay is good, but a little bit listing

Moving to a more detailed analysis,it is more suitable for the following paragraph. lets try "to begin with, initially, etc."
the rentals of films stood at above 180,000 in 2002, after that, there was a gradual decrease in the number of film rentals until it reached a low of around 55,000 in 2011. Likewise, movies sales in VHS format slightly declined from 2002 to 2006 when it finally plunged to the big zero in 2006. The level of sales in this particular format remained constant until it the end of period.