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O level: Leadership. Necessiity of nurturing leadership in everyone


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Leadership

Leadership is defined as an ability to organize a group of people to achieve a common goal. While many schools and educational institutions strongly emphasize on the importance of nurturing leadership in students, some students complain about the redundancy of it. Nevertheless, I am convinced that it is necessary to nurture leadership in everyone.

First and foremost, leadership is not merely about leading other people. By participating in leadership programs arranged by schools or community services, a student is likely to form excellent characters. For instance, by guiding the fellow students in an activity, the student is able to develop better interpersonal skills and confidence in communication. Moreover, holding a leadership position may put off the fear of burden and responsibility in students, preparing them to be responsible citizens in the future. Therefore, though one may not aim for career of authority, those characters are also essential in modern working environment.

Furthermore, as our society progresses, a lot of movements need to be done for the countries' development. Those movements acquire the combined unity of every working groups, companies and organizations. Therefore, the governments aim to nurture a generation of professional workers so as to attract investment as well as boost local productivity. In a professional worker, leadership is crucial. In fact, leadership is about inspiring, motivating and encouraging each others to work towards a common goal. So, it needs not to be the leader who do all those psychological support. Every member of the group should hearten and awaken the passion for work in each others. Thus, leadership is a significant contributor to the success

On the other hand, there are also plausible arguments in favor of the opinion that nurturing leadership is unnecessary as not everyone is a leader. Why waste time participating in those pointless leadership programs when one is unwilling to be trained and does not aim for leadership position? When everyone is prepared to be a leader, then who will be led. Admittedly, not everyone can be a leader, but not everyone can be a follower as well. Besides, a number of psychologists believe that leadership is potential in each individual. Although some people were born with leadership endowment, the majority of the people in authority have been through a process of training during their school time such as CEOs courses and management courses. When a person has a possibility to become a leader, why do not give him a chance to exercise his hidden talent. Although, it cannot be ensured that anyone going through the leadership training programs in schools or elsewhere will be able to obtain careers in authority, trial is not really redundant. Indeed, schools should continue to enhance the leadership programs to nurture the potential ability in each student.

To sum up, I strongly believe that it is necessary to nurture leadership in schools for a generation of multi-talented and responsible workforce is vital to ensure the country's economic stability in this turbulent period.

This is an one word topic and I tried to approach it as an argumentitive essay.
Commmets and suggestions are much appreciated.
Please rank me upon 100. I am doing O level this year.
Thanks :D

Feb 23, 2011, 09:43am   #
Furthermore, as our society progresses, a lot of movements need to be done for the countries' development.
Question: What type of development are you suggesting? Do you have any personal suggestions or proactive solution that may prove helpful in resolving the deficit of such growth?
...If so it might prove helpful to include them in order to be somewhat less vague.
*Furthermore there is a great need for many a significant change to occur in terms of the countries' physiological sociological and economic development*


So, it needs not to be the leader who do all those psychological support.
I can't quite put my finger on it but something doesn't sound right in this sentence... That is in addition to its lack of depth.
*In essence, the Role of a Leader is not to provide a shoulder to lean on/ or even to lend a helping hand or listening ear, so much as it is in the team's best interest to do so as individuals*

Your essay though well written seems to lack certain depth as it lacks some "Personal Experience" and though you stated the "Textbook Definition" of Leadership and "What it means to be a Leader" you failed to paint a picture of what society would look like in the event that the educational system did not in fact so strongly emphasize its' importance.

I'm not a teacher or even a writing expert but I hope I was able to lend some assistance without being too overly-critical after all this is my first post here. Good-luck with the essay though!
Chim Can Cook:
Leadership is defined as an ability to organize a group of people to achieve a common goal.

I suppose it is, but it is always boring to begin an essay with a definition! Think of a clever sentence to use at the start, here...

some students complain about the redundancy of it. Nevertheless, I am convinced that it is necessary to nurture leadership in everyone.---This requires more explanation. I am not sure what you mean. Leadership is an interesting subject.

I don't know how to rank you 1-100, but I'll show you where you have some small errors.

likely to form excellent character.

When everyone is prepared to be a leader, then who will be led. led?

You did very well! I really think you will get a great score. This is difficult as an argumentative essay, because most people would agree with it.

I think you would enjoy an article by Prentice... Google this:
Prentice, understanding leadership

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