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Job satisfaction and meeting employees needs - essay IELTS


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May 15, 2012, 01:55am   #
IELTS 7 Test 3 Writing Task 2
As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element if indiviadual wellbeing.
What factors contribute to job satisfaction ?
How realistic is the expection of job satifaction for all workers?


The job satisfaction issue has been an increasingly hot topic of discussion, because people spend most their life at work. In this essay I will analyze some possible factors of this phenomenon and then propose some solutions.

It is obvious that the factors of job satisfaction are diverse. In the first place is the salary, which has been recognized as one of the most effective motivations for staff for many decades. Specifically, the eventual purpose of working is leading a better life by earning money. Hence, there is no other elements could substitute the dominant position of the salary. Secondly, promotions also play a significant role in people's job satisfactions. For example, because of the instincts of human-beings, everyone desires to outstand. So, to some extent, the promotion not only satisfies the ambitions of employees, but also it tends to be the criteria for one's success. Last but not least, stress has the inherent advantages of augmenting productivity. However, once the stress was spinning out of the employer's control, and then the staff would live in a frustrating and anxious surrounding. As a result of it, with the increase of job-hopping incidence, the job satisfaction decrease dramatically incidence, which poses the threats to the survivals of companies.

Even though it is unrealistic for employers to meet all expectation from all employees, yet the widespread existences of some expectations are probable to be adopted as contractive suggestions that are beneficial to the job satisfaction. If the companies make progress in those factors mentioned, then the job satisfaction would be elevated considerably.

Hi Vincent!

The job satisfaction issue has been an increasingly hot highly debated topic of discussion, because people spend most a good portion of their life time at work. In this essay I will analyze some possible factors of this contributing to the phenomenon and then propose suggest some possible solutions.

It is obvious that the factors of job satisfaction are diverse. In the first place is the salary, which has been recognized as one of the most effective motivations for staff for many decades for many decades, recognized as the most effective motivation for employees. Specifically, the eventual purpose of working is leading a better luxurious life which is possible only by earning money. Hence, there is no other elements could substitute the dominant position of the salary. Secondly, promotions also play a significant role in people's job satisfactions. For example, because of the instincts of human-beings, everyone desires to outstand It is the basic instinct of human beings to outrun and excel one another. So, to some extent, the promotion not only satisfies the ambitions of employees, but also it it also tends to be the criteria for to measure one's success. Last but not the least, stress has the inherent advantages of augmenting productivity. However, once the stress was spinning out of the employer's spins out of control, and then the staff would live in be in a frustrating and anxious perturbed surrounding. As a result of it, with the increasing of job-hopping incidence incidents of job-hopping, the job satisfaction decreases dramatically incidence, which poses the threats a notable threat to the survivals of companies.

Even though it is unrealistic for employers to meet all expectation from all employees the expectations and demands of the employees, yet the widespread existence of some expectations are probable to be adopted as contractive suggestions that are beneficial to the job satisfaction hence benefit the job satisfaction phenomena. If the companies make progress in those factors mentioned the above mentioned factors, then the job satisfaction would be elevated considerably. to unimaginable heights.

I've just done a grammatical correction and tried to improve on some lines in the essay. You could try and frame up more ideas or further improve the piece. At the end of it, it was a good essay.
Hope I helped!! Tc (:
Seriously, you "laugh out loud" when ppl review your essay?? Thank you for making me feel miserable for helping you :l
Do get your essay done well......... hopefully
May 15, 2012, 09:06am   #
i didnt mean it, for me smile=lol,i just want to tell u i'm happy when i see ur correction! you know i'm not native speaker, sometime i maybe misunderstand some words! i feel so sorry if i did offend u.



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