I have attached my comments.
Let me know what you think.
I'm still concerned about the citations.
What format does your teacher prefer?
If there is no word limit, extend
your essay and describe ways to prevent bullying.
Good job with the revisions.
Have you experienced bullying too?
The unfortunate truth is that bullying never goes away
completely. Even in adulthood, there are still bullies.
They even justify their bullying by calling their victims
"mentally challenged" sometimes. The best way to defeat
bullying is to become really good at something in life.
And don't listen to other people too much--the good
or the bad. No one can tell you to do or not do something.
It's up to you.