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itels essay: should children learn foreign language from elementary school?


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May 31, 2009, 09:41pm   #1
Some people think that children should learn foreign language from elementary school but nor secondary school. What's your opinion? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
With the increasingly rapid economic globalization, learning foreign language becomes hotter than ever before. Meanwhile, the thorny issue, whether should children begin the foreign language study in primary school, is heated argued by public. From my own perspective, no matter whether children begin to learn foreign language from elementary school has both merits and demerits.
Granted, there could be some benefits to introduce multi-culture into the next generation. For one thing, young children are interested in everything surrounding them. Whenever they saw an unfamiliar subject, they always ask their parents or teachers what and why. Because of that, primary school time is the right ages for humanity to learn a kind of foreign language, as well as the oversea culture. For another, primary school students have more time to learn a foreign language. They have extremely little homework, and they are really energetic; thus, it is not a hard work for them to master a language.
Nevertheless, asking children to learn the foreign language is, to some extent, hazard to the diversity of the languages and culture. As we all known, children know a little mount of their own history and policy, so it is easy to misunderstand for what they need to learn a foreign language. Furthermore, young children are lack of the ability to distinguish the right from wrong. Some pupils from developing countries will wish they were born at the wealthy countries, after they access the foreign language and the culture, thus, they give the local language study up.
To sum up, though teaching the elementary school students foreign languages has risk for the local culture, can let people to master a foreign language like they were the native speaker, and know better the outside world.

May 31, 2009, 11:31pm   #2
You treat the two sides too equally -- it is not clear which side you come down on. That is, you haven't made it clear whether or not you believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Also, you neglect the most powerful reason for teaching children to learn a foreign language when they are as young as possible, namely, that it is much easier for people to learn a language when very young that it is when they get older. Some people have gone so far as to claim that students have to start learning a new language before they are 12 if they are ever to reach native proficiency with it. I don't know if I would go that far, personally, but that some experts would shows how much easier it is to learn a new language if you start studying it in your early years.
Jun 1, 2009, 07:45am   #3
At the same time, your argument about linguistic diversity is compelling, particularly in culture on the brink of language extinction. But, then, wouldn't the remedy be to teach the endangered language as the foreign language? Children's brains are so plastic when it comes to language that it's not hard for them to become fully bilingual or even trilingual.

But let's turn to the writing rather than the content of the essay, because here is where you are still needing work. For the most part, your sentence structure is fine, but your verb tense is sometimes off. Also I notice that you sometimes leave out the article -- a, and or the -- before the noun when one is needed or put in an article when one is not needed. (That's a common error -- it's so hard to keep straight when they are needed and when not.) I also notice that you sometimes choose the wrong preposition -- another very common error, as prepositions function so differently in different languages.

Here are some suggested corrections:

With the increasingly rapid economic globalization, learning a foreign language becomes more important than ever before. Meanwhile, the thorny issue of whether children should begin the foreign language study in primary school, is heated argued by the public.

From my own perspective, each side has has both merits and demerits: It doesn't matter whether children begin to learn foreign language in elementary school or later.

Nevertheless, asking children to learn a foreign language is, to some extent, a hazard to the diversity of the languages and culture.

As we all know, children know a little mount of their own history and policy, so it is easy for them to misunderstand why they need to learn a foreign language. Furthermore, young children are lack of the ability to distinguish the right from wrong.
Jun 1, 2009, 08:40pm   #5
Hey, I notice your comments on other people's threads have been short and noticeably unhelpful. Comments such as "good luck" will only get deleted (as indeed several of yours just have been), and so won't count against your thread-opening quota anyway. You expect people commenting on your thread to give you detailed, useful feedback, so you must do the same when commenting on other people's threads.
Jun 2, 2009, 09:03pm   #7
To sum up, though teaching the elementary school students foreign languages pose a threat to the has risk for the local culture. Can let people to master a foreign language like they were the native speaker, and know better the outside world.



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