Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Many people do their choice of profession in educational institutions, mostly in schools. This choice is often based on their favorite subjects, on subjects in which they succeed and why not following to the advices of their teachers. Thus educational institutions have an important role in a life of a student, particularly in a process of profession choice. Teachers and advisers should help students to reveal their real talents and make a correct choice based on their strengths, so that they will have successful career and will not regret for it. Meanwhile, one should be very sensitive when dissuading a young student not to engage in some field.
Educational institutions are not only supposed to give a knowledge to young, but also help them to find their preferences, strengths and talents, based on which they will later choose their further study field. During years in a schools, students get acquainted with a broad range of subjects, they try to figure out what is their favorite spheres so that to continue in that field. During their process the help of teachers is highly important. During their work with a student teachers are able to notice which is his/her strengths, after that they can help this student to like that particular field and choose it as his/her further study area. Moreover, there are cases when student's favorite subject becomes the one his/her beloved teacher taught. This came from the fact, that this particular teacher was able to make student to like his/her subject. Of course all this does not mean that student should ignore other subjects, but most of us in school usually paid more attention to our favorite areas.
In some cases it is not that easy to find strength of a student even for good teachers. In such a case it can seem that either student can not succeed in any field or he/she is doing well in all areas. In these situations also teacher's attitude can have great impact in student's further decision. Teachers should provide diverse set of tasks to a student, so that to be able to help him/her to find out which preferences he/she has. This was exactly the case I was in the school. I was good at several subjects: languages, mathematics and physics and informatics. I was not able to understand which one these fields I want to be my further area of study. At first for long time I wanted to become a journalist, than I thought that an economist will also suit my preferences, but eventually I chose Computer Science and that was my teacher who helped me to understand that actually this is my favorite field and I want to pursue it for my life.
However, the worst scenario is when teacher sees that a student is trying to pursue a field in which he/she has a little chance to succeed. In such situations teachers should try to make a student understand that he/she is in wrong direction. In order to do this a teacher should be truly sensitive, so that not to discourage a student and not make him/her feel humiliated or lose self-esteem. Surely it can be hard to make one admit that he/she will find very hard to succeed in a field he/she is fond of, especially if that person is teenager, however teachers should not be afraid of this difficulties, they should be patient in their actions in a way of making a student reconsider his/her choice.
Educational institutions have a great importance in lives of students. Here students not only find a knowledge but also a elder friends in a face of teachers, who should help them to make find their real talents based on which they can do correct choice of their further education. Sometimes it will be hard for teachers to reveal to a student that the field he/she wants to pursue will not bring him/her to success and even harder to student to admit it, but anyway teacher should bear these difficulties so that their students do not make wrong decision.
- You should build upon this story as the most compelling reason in support of your argument. You specifically mention that your teacher helped you make the decision to take computer science. How did she or he do that? What kind of guidance did you receive that dissuaded you from taking journalism or economics? This will be a very solid example of how teachers can slowly dissuade a student from taking an interest in a course he is not suited for.
The above portion of your essay is actually the best discussion within the whole essay that delivers the essence of the prompt. I believe that you should rewrite the whole essay, using the aforementioned paragraph as your opening statement and then building your succeeding paragraphs around it. That way you can develop a cohesive and concise paper that discusses the prompt based on the strongest evidence possible, your personal experience.
If you like my suggestion and revise your essay, we can review the content of the new one and work on the grammar issues then :-) Good luck!
Thank you very very much for your comment, I appreciate it very much. :)
I agree, I should have developed my example more thoroughly. However I'm not sure that whole essay should be developed around it. After all this example is from my experience and though it worked for me, it could not be true for other people. I thought that GRE essays should discuss the issue not only from one point of view but analyse it from different sides, so that reviewers can not attack it much.
While it is true that the best essays are those discussed from all sides, the prompt also asks you to provide examples that can help you strengthen your argument. Therefore, you will not be out of line when you discuss and develop the essay from a personal experience stand point. The reason I say that is because after you present your personal experience, you can also find loopholes in your own comments and from there, defend your stand. That way you will also end up discussing other points of view in relation to what you expressed.
I believe that this passage from the prompt best explains how you should develop your essay:
In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
What better way to discuss and challenge a stand on a position other when it comes from a personal standpoint? You could ask your friends and classmates to read your essay and question you about your stand. As you defend your essay verbally, you will also learn how to defend it in a written manner. This will help you plug the arguments and attacks from the other side. Of course there is no foolproof stance on anything so expect a lot of arguments regarding your stance when you ask for opinions about it :-)
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Sometimes it will be hard for teachers toreveal tounderstnad a student that the field he/she wants to pursue will not bringconduct him/her to success and even harder to student to admit it, but anyway teacher should bear these difficulties so that their students do not make wrong decision.
your essay I think is good, but you need to focus on words which are used in your essay. It is better not to use words such as bring or reveal in a wrong way.
Thnak you for your advice which you mentioned on my essay:)
