There are some grammar mistakes;
rapid technological growth provides way
growth provides / growths provideconnected towith this world
connected with the worldAs a result, many people, particularly software professionals, tend to work from home rather than go to workplace.
.... here you are going out of topic. Your topic talks about how technology affects communication between people today and not about working online from home. In the introduction you should strictly stay with the prompt as it is the place for you to introduce your topic to the reader.
Nowadays, rapid technological growth provide way for increasing number of people to stay connected to this world via internet. As a result, many people, particularly software professionals, tend to work from home rather than go to workplace. Despite the fact of having numerous advantages by using computers and internet, we cannot overlook the drawbacks involved due to reckless utilization of the modern technology.
.... It is the second sentence that is not in line.