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introduce yourself in MBA Interview


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Jan 31, 2011, 07:13am   #
hie,i was seeking an appropriate answer for the question introduce yourself in an MBA Interview.
inputs are required.

Good Morning all,
I am kumar sourav.I am from Nilokheri,a small town in karnal distict ,haryana.Presently i am working with *** company as an associate system Engineer from Nov 2009 .My profile is as a BizTalk developer and support with *** account.Before Nov i was working with XXX as Engineer-trainee.
as per my family,my father is a businessman and my mother is a homemaker.We have a business of egg trading and poultries.
I strongest belief is self belief and I love talking to people.
I am intersted in gymming,rapping and surfing.
My short term aim is to join a reputed b-school to gain sufficient knowledge and learning about various aspects of business so that some time down the line i can jon my family business and help it to expand with my inputs.

Jan 31, 2011, 05:51pm   #
Here are the following corrections on your writing:

I am kumar sourav.I am from Nilokheri,a small town in karnal distict district,haryana.Presently i am working with *** company as an associate system Engineer from Nov 2009 .My profile (I think my profile thing can be replaced as "my job title") is as a BizTalk developer and support with *** account.Before Nov i was working with XXX as Engineer-trainee.
as per my family,my father is a businessman and my mother is a homemaker.We have a business of egg trading and poultries.
I strongest belief is self belief I have a strong self-belief and I love talking to people.
I am intersted interested in gymming going to gym,rapping and surfing.
My short term aim is to join a reputed b-school to gain sufficient knowledge and learning about various aspects of business so that some time down the line i can jon join my family business and help it to expand with my inputs.

**note: It would be better if you organize your working experience chronically (from oldest to newest)
Jan 31, 2011, 11:36pm   #
Thanks zaid for your valuable inputs.
zaid one thing,this is regarding my interview question.so in an interview question ,are we supposed to tell all our past work experiences as well,or we should focus on the present work ex.
Feb 1, 2011, 04:38pm   #
I believe it is better to do this:
If your previous work experience is in three companies or less, tell a brief statement about your role in each one and mention more details about your current work,
if you have plenty of previous experiences, pick up three of them and focus more on the last one.
Feb 6, 2011, 10:29pm   #
I see that you did not capitalize your name or the name of the district. Be sure to capitalize when necessary, and I also think it is important to use an interesting word or phrase to establish a memorable theme in that first paragraph. Probably, it is best to establish an interesting, memorable theme in the first sentence of that short first paragraph you used.

I also think the best way to improve the strength of this essay is to review a few great books or articles about the kind of business that interests you, because that will enable you to be more specific about your short-term goals.

I think the reader is going to be aware their seriousness and enthusiasm!



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