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The internet gives us a lot of information, someone thinks it might create problems.


angelinee827 2 / 4  
Apr 1, 2011   #1
Dear all, below is my composition for a TOEFL Topic, I am going to have the exam next week, hope you can help me to improve my grammar or any others! Thank you in advance!!

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If someone asks me what was the most important invention during these decades, I will definitely give my answer to the internet. We can always surf on the internet to get the required information, which help us to save more times and energy by finding them. Even some people might insist that too much information will create some problems; however, from my point of views, the internet still brings some valuable knowledge to us.

In the first place, it is not costly to surf on internet, and the result we got is much more then this. For instance, when I studied in the university, I always have a lot of papers and reports, which many of them required some data from foreign countries. To save more time, all I have to do is turn on the computer and use some searching engine like Google and after key-in some key words, the needed information will just come out, I just need to verify and classify. Therefore, using internet is not only easy but also help us to save more time in our daily life or jobs.

Secondly, we can obtain a lot of useful information from the internet immediately. Assuming that I am planning my trip to Japan, I can check the weather on internet, also, there are many people who write the blog to share their travel memories which can also help me when doing consideration for the visiting. Moreover, I can do the comparison on the ticket's price among every agency, so my planning can be more efficiently because of internet.

To sum up, internet not only provides much useful information instantly but also easy to operate. More old people even start to learn how to surf on the net in order to keep in touch with their family who lived abroad. To avoid the potential problem for too much information, I think it is better for us to check the details for what we provide and how we access, that will keep us away from the danger behind the internet.
Miss Pearl 1 / 3  
Apr 3, 2011   #2
hi I am not a teacher but I think that you have some mistakes:
which help us to save more much time and more energy by finding them.
however, from my point of views view(not s)
And I think that you didn't write about problems. In my opinion in 1 body paragraph you should write about advantages and in 2 paragraph about problems
butterbescotch 6 / 41  
Apr 3, 2011   #3
It looks good Angeline. But I suggest a 3 body paragraphs rather than 2.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 4, 2011   #4
If someone asks me what was the most important invention during in recent decades, I will definitely indicate that it is the Internet.

The Internet should be capitalized, because it is a proper noun.
We can always surf on the Internet to get ...

use "the"

In the first place, it is not costly to surf on the Internet, and ...

...the result we got is much more than this.

Again, use "the"
To sum up, the Internet not only provides ...

Nice job!!!!!!!!!!


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