I will study carefully to write a better essay next time.
This is already a good essay. You showed that you understand the prompt, and you responded clearly:
It really helped to alleviate the tension.--- this is very good, because it shows that you understand the prompt.
Do you understand azeri's corrections?
For example:
Change chance
Excellent ending!!!
It will make the world more peaceful by easing internation tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
But it should say this:
It will make the world more peaceful by easing
international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.