Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In today's sophisticated society, people of developing countries are still hard to obtain their basic rights such a better healthcare, proper education, and a great source of income. As such, undoubtedly official states of richer countries should share the responsibility of assisting poorer nations. Different measures exist, ranging from global trade access to financial payments or even medical assistance. Therefore, I would argue that certain measures are infinitely better than other methods.
The most efficient manner to assist the less fortunate states is not through a better healthcare or proper education because this method is imperfect and only offers short-lived relief from long-term challenges, and also this assistance can be alleviated at any time, leaving the country drifted. For instance, economical help from the United States to demerit regions in Indonesia has gradually reduced since the onset of the monetary crisis. As a result, there is no doubt that even though several islands may have well educated or health, the merit was temporary, thus leaving the regions of Indonesia to look for other donators.
On the other hand, commerce is the most substantial type of assistance which can be helped since it will improve strong capabilities to serve trade for the long term if the poorer countries have an excellent opportunity to develop it. These strengths are able to increase the growth of the local economy and are more reliable than education or health. For example, while the poorer nations trade with the richer ones, the official states can search for other foreign partners to trade with. Consequently, it is clear that this would offer more stability and diversification for the states.
The aforementioned evidence reveals that although assistance is absolutely necessary for the poorer nations, assisting in education or health is a temporary solution. I strongly believe that the viable solution is to offer international market access in order to produce more goods and to generate regular profits for the regions.
Hello
I think better don't use example in the first paragraph, you can explain your idea and chose your opinion.
-In today's sophisticated society, people of developing countries are still hard to obtain their basic rights such a better health care , proper education, and a great source of income.
- it will improve strong capabilities to serve trade for the long term if the poorest countries have an excellent opportunity to develop it.
- I strongly believe that the viable solution is to offer international market access in order to produce more goods and generate regular profits for the regions.
Your writing is good, but I have some suggestions
1. You have to discuss both views agree and disagree with the statement that government of rich nations should take responsibility for helping the poor nations based on the task and to what extent do you agree or disagree, instead of giving measures to solve these problems.
2. In your introduction, it will be better if you put your argument why you agree or disagree
For example
In this development era, it is becoming harder for people in developing countries to access health care, good education, trade. Some exerts believe that governments in developed countries should take a role in poor nations improvement in certain area. As such, supporting from rich nations such as financial support is very essential for infrastructure's improvement like school, hospital and road in developing countries. However, others argue that each country have to independent improving their capacity without depending on other nations.
For instance, economical help from the United States to demerit regions in Indonesia has gradually reduced since = because ( so you need a clause after "since" since the onset of the monetary crisis
, the merit was(has been) temporary
