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Insecure feelings in people. Causes and suggestions.


lacusclyne 16 / 25 11  
Jun 27, 2015   #1
There is a large number of number of people who experience the sense of unsafetiness either at home or when they are out. Personally, I think this issue is very much related to criminal situation social news media which should receive more attention and concerns from both governments and public.

There are several reasons as to why I think this issue has direct connection to criminal rate and information published daily. First and foremost, it is getting harder to get a place in the job market, which demands not only academic knowledge, working experiences and skills but also tech-savviness. Thus, more and more people are being competed and having difficulties in getting and maintaining their position in their current careers. Those who lose in job competition are more likely to be tempted by illegal activities and become criminal, which provides the best explanation for the increasing in criminals every year. Secondly, people's mental and spiritual life are presently continually bombarded by all sort of negative information from news media. Too much exposure to such information can, for most of the time, takes a huge toll on their outlook of life.

Such distressing issue can be addressed by several proactive actions and measures. Governments can decrease the chances at which a normal person could turn into criminals by introducing some policies concerning increasing wages for workers who have financial problems, temporarily exempting them from some unnecessary taxes. Furthermore, publishers and editors should regularly control the contents of social media to make sure that not too much information about the downside of the society is published and broadcast.

In brief, increasing in criminal rates, inappropriate information uploaded by the social media are main precursors to people's feeling of unsafetiness. Thus, Solutions and measures must be carefully considered
wadpk 1 / 5  
Jun 28, 2015   #2
I have a couple of suggestions here, hope it helps.

There are a large number of number of people who experienced the sense of danger either when they are at home or when they are out.

From my own perspective, this is an urgent issue which is related to the current criminal situation and the information updated by news media deserves more attention and concerns from both governments and public.

On one hand, there are several reasons which I think that this issue has direct connection with criminal rate and daily published information .

First and foremost, as the world changes, it becomes increasingly demanding(of ..) .

Therefore, getting a position in the job market is hard, which demands not only academic knowledge, working experiences and skills but also technical savvy .

Furthermore, publishers and editors should regularly control the contents of social media to make sure that not too much information about the downside of the society is published and broadcasted .In brief, increasing in criminal rates and inappropriate information uploaded by the social media are main causes of people's feeling of danger . Thus, solutions and measures must be carefully considered.

Anyway, your essay is great, keep it up!
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 28, 2015   #3
- There is a large number of number(make sure to proof read) of people who experience the sense of being unsafeunsafetiness either at home or when they are out.

- Personally, I think this issue is very much related to criminal situation, social media and news media which should receive more attention and concerns from both governments and the public.

- Thus, more and more people are being competed and having difficulties in getting and maintaining their position in their current careersas competition is getting higher .

- Those who lose in job due to competition are more likely to be tempted by illegal activities and become criminal,

- which provides the best explanation forof the increasing innumbers of criminals every year. -

- Secondly, people's mental and spiritual life are presently continually bombarded by all sorts of negative information from newsthe media.

- Too much exposure to such information can, for most of the time, takes a huge toll on their outlook of life.

There you have it, a few corrections that will hopefully help.

Keep writing

Cheers!!!


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