It is unarguablytrue that every single achievement should be recognized for contribution to progresses within its field, especially ones that set the very first bricks on the field.
- Every single achievement...recognized for
its to progress...ones that set
the foundation of the field
Nevertheless, past successes play the grounding and incentive role to endeavor further successes as we attempt to breakthrough another limit .
- Past success play an important role in the development of a person in his chosen field.
majorly from scientists ruminating on previous ideas or frameworks.
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mostly from scientists who are further developing previous...
It would have been impossible for Einstein to come up with his renowned relativity theory without serious understandings of physics theories proposed by Newton.
- without a serious
Would Steve Jobs be able to enhance human's experience with electronic devices without the first creation of desktop?
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This question is unnecessary as a more important foundation was established earlier.Obviously, Newtonian physics and the human's original computer are undeniably huge achievements.
As a result, these examples implicitly articulate an axiom in scientific progression: radical findings always start from past discoveries.
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This example implicitly
articulatesCertainly, it
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It ...
workings that pave roads
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which unprecedentedly changed the ways market participants approach investments.
- market participants approach
edConsequently, the world recognized famous investors like Warrant Buffet or George Soros, who applied Graham's frameworks to advance further investment strategies that are highly appreciated by scholars and practitioners.
- This led world famous...
to apply Grahams...
Graham's ideas were partially engendered by a fact that the markets were chaotic at that time as the 1930s Great Depression gloomed, causing panic and imprudence amongst investors .
- Grahams ideas were endangered by the Great Depression of the 1930's which caused panic among investors.
Finally, past achievements are always motivation for followers to explore and conquer new things.
- ... past achievements
always motivateThis is unambiguously seen in sports,
- This is seen
in the world of sports,
creates new threshold for future players
- creates
a new...
that human's limits may be unlimited
That also re- emphasizes my assertion
In conclusion, remarkable achievements
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Remarkable achievements...
The points of discussion that you used were right on track to respond to the prompts. Your examples are so effective and helps to explain your point of view in a solid manner. I hope you don't mind my revising some sentences and pointing out your grammar problems in the essay. I thought it would show you how the essay could flow better as well. Keep practicing. This essay of yours shows your potential to become even better at writing future essays :-)