Hi every body everybody
please see my essay and tell me how it works for tofle TOEFL
test like an esssay essay
with higher score (how can I get improve in writing essay for Toefl tests).Thanks
Most people enjoy their high salary and it makes them feel satisfied of being affordable for all their living cost or expenditure
. Because of this feeling, they work hard even they don't
have enjoyment enjoy it
. However, life is too small and too valuable to be wasted
like this in this way to earn more and more money
. Some people desire to work at a job that makes them feel enjoyment
to have by having
their interest job, more free time, and good environment at work.
First, people prefer working at a favorite job that they enjoy rather than earning a lot of money. If they love their job and find it interesting, they absolutely feel happy and successful. For example,
while teaching in school; I really enjoy my job even though I earn less money although I earn less money by teaching in schools, I enjoy it. Because it is what I really want
. I feel get more energy and great passion when I teach, so it helps me get higher level of performance that aims to have more enjoyment. (you have mentioned it before)
Second, people enjoy more at a job that provides more free time for them. They are eager to do their job because they find more free time during work hours and feel free to do their personal things which save their time for their family. If somebody has a high responsibility in his or her job position, he or she doesn't feel free in any time (sometimes)
; though, he or she earns a lot of money. Moreover, nobody does have (has) time to enjoy this money earned (earned money) since there is no time to sit and play with his or her children.!!! (your reason in this paragraph does not make a sense well. Try to find more logical reason)
Third, if somebody finds a good environment at his work, he would enjoy more than earning more money. It is really important to have friendly co-workers at work to spent pleasant time and do their job together peacefully. Work hours would be at least eight hours in a day, so lack of a pleasant environment is a real matter (can be a problem) for anyone who wants to enjoy through a work day. As a result, people who seek to enjoy more at their work than earn money; find their pleasant environment at their job (have more chance to find a job with suitable environment).
As sum up (in conclusion), money is essential for the survival but should not become our obsession. It is a fact that enjoying at work, is more important than earning more money, and it is caused by more (it leads to) having (more) free time and good (better) environment during a favorite job.
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