Not a bad starting point. The only problem, aside from a couple of grammatical tweaks, I see is whether this particular format is appropriate for the intended audience. If the audience is to be some typical employees or in a public magazine, then it is well-written and appropriate. Yet, for academic and higher institutions, the sentences are a bit too consistently simple, making it a bit repetitive over time. Thus, I will leave that to you to change, but I have fixed the grammr herein:
, a supervisor must be kind-hearted, slow to anger, and stern if need be. Kind-hearted
, so that he as in to
his employees well. A supervisor must know how to separate personal problem from work
and not take his personal problem to the office. He mustn't let his anger get the better of him: j
ust because he's a boss, it
doesn't mean he can lash out at his employees whenever he feels like,
's is surely
not a quality of a
. They must further be s
need be such circumstances arise in whch it is necessary. P
oint in case,
if we bump into each if an employee and his supervisor encounter one another other
on streets, he
would deign toshould
offer a smile,
but be sternyet
at work, he must be sterm
so as not to encourage his employees to take their works lightly and disrespect him.
, a boss must put aside his status and not
set his mind into be bent upon
thinking that he
above all his employees. Instead, h
e should try to befriend them
as opposed to just order them around
. Rather, he should
try to see things
from their insights and heed their advice instead of imposing his own opinion on his employees. He should try to build a good
relationship with his employees based on trust. Truth be told, the only way he can get them to respect him, is earn their respect and trust: t
herefore, he should.
Last but not leastMoreover, he should have
leadership and be an expert in his field.
That is how he can get people to follow him. Rudely speaking, if you have an imbecile for a boss, you would more likely suck up to him in front and insult him behind his back.
In a nutshell, no one respects
that kind ofsuch a
boss. Instead, he should demonstrate his ability to lead others
show them he's capable of leading, in turn
on them the importance of co-operation between the supervisor and his
workers in order to obtain a better performance.
Ascertain that each employee takes their job seriously and encourage the good relationship between co-workers.
sections are poorly phrased or ambigous, so you should try to reword those parts. Also, really fix up your conclusion: it is really abrupt and does not really have any lasting impact after reading through it. Hope that helped, and good luck!