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TOEFL: Important to be able to work with a group of people or independently?


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Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Some people like working alone, because they do not like discuss with others. In my point of view, I think discuss with others is a good way to achieve a goal. Hence, I like work with a group of people, because it can finish the work much more easily. There are numerous clear reasons and I would explore some important ones here.
First of all, working with a team will much more efficient. Group members can share different works. For example, when I was a student, I often finished the project with my classmates. We have a team, so the cooperation plays an important role for a good project. Some members collected data and others do different work. If I have to finish this project alone, then I would spend a lot of time.
Secondly, according to team work, I can learn many merits from others and improve my disadvantages. Some people have a great attitude to solve many difficult problems, like patience and honor. That will help me a lot. For another thing, some of my good friends were my group members in school, because we work together for a long time, so we know each other. We have some special memories when we work together.
Thirdly, people will argue with others sometimes, maybe it will delay the process of work and make us unhappy, but this is an important thing that we have to learn. Society is a big group; we have learned to receive other's opinion. Sometimes, the confidence will blind us mind and judge other's opinion. Cooperating with others can help us to be a great person and success in the future.
In conclusion, cooperation is an important virtue that we have to learn. If we do not know how to work with others, maybe we will become a selfish person.
So, I strongly agree that work with a group of people is more important.

Hi This is my correction :)

Some people like working alone, because they do not like discussing things with others. In my point of view, I think having discussion discuss with others is a good way to achieve a goal goals. Hence, I like work to work with a group of people, because it can finish the work The work can is going to be finished with much more easily easy. There are numerous clear reasons and I would explore some important ones here. ( you don't have to introduce your points like that) (you have to mention the points here and not introducing them like this)

First of all, working with a team will be much more efficient. Group members can share different works. For example, when I was a student, I often finished the project with my classmates. We have a team, so the cooperation playsed an important role for a good project. Some members collected data and others do did different works. If I have to finish had finished this project alone,I would could have spent a lot of time.

Secondly, according to the team work, I can learn many merits from others and improve my disadvantages defects. Some people have a great attitude to solve many difficult problems, like patience and honor. That will help me a lot. For another thing, some of my good friends were one of my group members in school, because we have worked together for a long time, so we know each other very well. We have had some special memories when we worked together.

Thirdly, sometimes people will argue with others sometimes, maybe it will delay the process of work and make us unhappy, but this is an important thing that we have to learn. (sorry I did not get this point) Society is a big group; we have learned learnt to receive accept other's opinions. Sometimes, the confidence will blind us our minds and make us judge other's opinions. Cooperating with others can help us to be a great person and to be success successful in the future.

In conclusion, cooperation is an important virtue that we have to learn. If we do not know how to work with others, maybe we will become a selfish person. So, I strongly agree that work with a group of people is more important.

Regards, :-)
kevinhsin1124:
Some people like working alone, because they do not like discuss with others.

Nesreen corrected this by changing it to "discussing." That is great, because discussing is a noun form of the verb "to discuss." I wanted to help you master this by showing some examples.
Some people enjoy working alone, because they do not like to discuss the work with others. --- this way is correct, too.

"I like discussing essays." = "I like discussing essays."
They mean the same thing.
I believe it is important to write. = I believe writing is important.
Swimming is hard. = It is hard to swim.

So, that is good lesson on how "to verb" = verbing
My IELTS teacher says that we should not write 'Thirdly', if 'Fourthly' is not following...

Its better to write 'Lastly' or 'Last but not the least'.

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Please correct me, if I'm not getting correct education.
rashminder:
Please correct me, if I'm not getting correct education.

Your teacher is right. If the 4rth thing is last, it is better to say last. But actually, to me it seems just as good to say fourth sometimes.

I am going to tell you five steps to writing a paragraph. First, make sure you think of one clear message you want the reader to remember. Second, write a sentence that expresses that idea. Third, you should add another sentence that gives an example or more explanation. Fourth, you should go back and precede those two sentences with a topic sentence. Fifth, go to the end of the paragraph and add a conclusion/transition sentence.

In this case, it is good to use fifth instead of last, but last is okay, too.
Notice that I do not use the ly.
That ly is terrible! Just write first, second, third, fourth,....

:-)



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