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The importance of a computer to college students


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Technology has been dramatically developed worldwide so far in most of social life aspects, especially Internet and telecommunication. In university, they set up Internet networks to help student connect each other. Moreover, in daily life each student faces with many other problems requiring the support of Internet connecting with a computer which is necessary to college student for two reasons: storing documents and keeping in touch with others.

At the first place, students can use their computer to store important assignments and valuable images. Firstly, when being given homework whether in groups or individuals, most of students now type and then print them out with A4 papers. Moreover, after finishing lessons of a day, teachers always send students the lectured slides in class via emails in order to help them revise the knowledge carefully. Secondly, a computer not only give students chances to easily see family members' images to partly reduce their homesickness but support them to look back the past moments recorded with pictures with friends, then gain awareness of friendship and be more treasured to present life. In short, a computer seems to play an important role to college students in doing exercises, revising lessons and keeping memory of images.

At the second place, students can conveniently keep in touch with their family and friends. First, a great number of student come to college and live far from home. They usually fall into feeling of loneliness and nostalgia, which fairly affects their study and life. Therefore, owning a computer connecting Internet helps students update family's situations and makes them feel secure, be concentrated on study for higher results. Second, most of students tend to keep contact with old friends at high school to maintain the long-standing friendship. They add yahoo nicknames of each other, chat and share emotions together via Internet, which can be the cheapest and fastest way of far-distance communication. Additionally, entering a new environment means having more new friends who students can share unspeakable feelings and thinking via yahoo or other Internet services with a computer.

Generally, in modern society the vital role of computer to people, especially to college students cannot be denied. It helps students keeping safely important documents as well as maintaining the relationship with others.

Sep 28, 2010, 08:48am   #
Hi Candy,

I corrected the first two paragraphs of your essay -- and I think that you can grasp the rest of the essay yourself, if you follow what I did. Essentially, Candy, you did well; but you seem to lose it with the agreement with respect to nouns and verbs. There were some other areas, as you will see. Good idea, however!

--Mark



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