I corrected the first two paragraphs of your essay -- and I think that you can grasp the rest of the essay yourself, if you follow what I did. Essentially, Candy, you did well; but you seem to lose it with the agreement with respect to nouns and verbs. There were some other areas, as you will see. Good idea, however!
Technology has been
dramatically developed worldwide so far in most of social life aspects, especially Internet and telecommunicationdeveloped dramatically, worldwide and affects all walks of life, especially with respect to the Internet and telecommunications
In university, they set up Internet networks to help student connect each other.At the University, they have set up the Internet networks to help students connect with each other.
Moreover, in daily life each student faces
many other problems requiring the support of the
Internet connecting with a computer,
which is necessary
college student for two reasons: storing documents and keeping in touch with others.
At theIn the
first place, students can use their computers
to store important assignments and valuable images.
whether in groups or individuals, most of students now type their assignments
and then print them out with A4 papers. Moreover, after finishing the
day, teachers always send students the lectured slides in class via
in order to help them revise the knowledge carefully. Secondly, a computer not only gives
see family members' images
to partlyin an effort to
reduce their homesickness
but support them to look back the past moments recorded with pictures with friends, then gain awareness of friendship and be more treasured to present life.
In short, a computer seems to play an important role
college students in doing exercises, revising lessons and keeping memory of images.