Classifying people is not easy. Human's areis a complicated creature'sthatwhich makes classifying people difficult. There are many theories to classify people, but I like one of the old theories in Romance of the Three Kingdoms (Is this a book, movie, something else? If so, look up how to properly edit it online. Like if it needs to be underlined, italicized, etc.) . It classify peopleIt classifies people by their cleverness and diligence in to four classes,: the people who are clever and diligent, the people who are clever and lazy, the people who are stupid and lazy, and the people who are stupid and diligent.
First, there are people who are clever and diligent. They are the best. They are the most effective people because they are clever and diligent.This is repetitive If they work, their works are always perfect. They are appropriate to promote and be a leader. They can be a leader increasingly. (Not sure what you are trying to say here but maybe "They can increasingly become leaders"??
Second, there are people who are clever and lazy. They have a good point in their cleverness. They are effective people, but not too much like the first class. The people in this class suit to be a thinkerthinkers . They are appropriate to plan the work, not start to do the work. If you order them to conspire a plan, the plan will be good. Conversely, the work will be not good and delayed if you order them to do (start?) the work.
Third, there are people who are stupid (too harsh of a word?) and lazy. They have no idea and no diligence. They seem useless, but they have advantage. They suit to follow order and expend energyThey are well suited for following orders and expending energy , but you have to keep your eyes on them. You cannot leave them think and do the work by themselves.
Fourth, there are people who are stupid and diligent. They are the most dangerous people. They are trouble maker because of their stupidity and diligence. They do not suit for any works.They are not fit for any work. They will make disorder to other people or the institute if they start the work. Their diligence will make disorder because they do not consider before they do.
Although people are difficult to classify because of their complication and variety that make many ways to classify people. However, we can classify people from cleverness and diligence. Most business men like to use this theory to classify their subordinates and it comes true.
I like that your essay is centered around this theory! To begin with, I think you should expand and vary your vocabulary. Substitute lazy for lethargic or slow, stupid for simpleminded, diligent for persistent or relentless. Another thing is to vary your syntax and sentence lengths. When you expand on the four classifications, each sentence is the same structure, leaving it slightly boring. You could easily make it more interesting by changing the structure, combining short and long sentences. Also, try to make those sentences less cookie cutter. They follow the same pattern (They are A. They are B. They do not suit C. They are fit for D. etc.) Try to elaborate more on your conclusion.
Best of luck and hope I helped!
