Topic: Nowadays, sending children to boarding school is being increasingly popular. What is the reason? Do you think it is a positive development?
The number of boarding students now is on the increase. Although the fee is more expansive than it in the public school, many people now choose this type of school for their children because of several reasons such as adequate facilities for learning and relaxing, small classroom, special attention in each individual.
To begin with, the boarding school provides students with high quality academic programs and all modern conveniences for studying and entertaining. Teachers always wish to supply depth and breath of the academic courses to students and they are able to draw attention into every person
since the class size is very small, just from 10 to 15 people. In addition, it has amazing facilities and good services in both learning and relaxing, for example, a various range of sport equipment, well-stocked library, advanced laboratories, a building of art including a stage for performances, a movie theatre, galleries. After school, students can participate in their favourite sport clubs to stretch the body and make friends. Annually, they sometimes held some plays, dancing or singing performances to help students interact well with other people in different age. These things create many benefits for pupils to learn.
The boarding school is very good environment for students to train themselves to become successful people. Firstly, they go to this school to have the best preparation for university so that they focus on studying seriously. Being surrounded by diligent classmates, it is chance for them to practice and compete with the others to achieve highest scores. Secondly, going far from home is also an opportunities for them to live independently. It is time for them to learn how to cope with the live with their peer. Gradually, they have to be responsible more for themselves with every action. Hence, they know exactly the valuable of family and the independent life that is very crucial for them in adulthood. Despite just coming home on holiday, they still feel happy and comfortable since they live their own life in decent, secured residential houses and acquire useful knowledge everyday.
In conclusion, this positive trend will develop and become more popular in all over the world. It creates a new page of services and quality in education.
Hello, I would like to help you with your essay. I will focus on word choice and help you correct any minor errors.
1st paragraph: In the first sentence, change the word increase to rise. Expansive is a word used to describe area. You should replace expansive with expensive because this refers to money. I think you can add some words to end your last sentence, "...small classroom size, and special attention to each individual".
2nd paragraph: The first sentence change the boarding to "a boarding". Also, add "the" before modern. The second sentence change into to "to". The next sentence you should change relaxing to "recreation". Start a new sentence with these revisions, "For example, boarding schools have a variety of sports equipment, well-stocked libraries...and galleries".Favourite is spelled favorite.
The last two sentences have slight revisions: "Annually, they sometimes held some have plays, dancing or singing performances to help students interact well with other people of different ages. These activities..."
3rd paragraph: Since the topic is continuing, you should begin this paragraph with: "A boarding school is also a very good environment..." The next sentence could be changed slightly, "...a university so that they focus on studying seriously." The needs to be rearranged in the next sentence: "...with others to achieve the highest scores." Change going to being and opportunities to opportunity.
"Hence, they know exactly the valuable value of family and the independent life independence that is very crucial for them in when they become an adult."
4th paragraph: Delete "in" after popular. The second sentence is confusing. Do you mean it creates unique opportunities and provides quality education?
Hello, Dieu Anh!
I want to give some suggestion, hope this can help
The number of boarding students now is on the increase. Although the fee is more expansive than it in the public school, many people now choose this type of school for their children because of several reasons such as adequate facilities for learning and relaxing, small classroom, special attention in each individual.
I think this introduction is already good, since it has brief examples. However, you should give the opposite statement about the issue. This is my example for the introduction;
The existence of boarding school is becoming a controversial issue. The main cause of the significant increase in the enthusiasts of this institution is the belief provides a better education. Most parents believe that their children will be well-educated due to the excellent facilities and the intensive learning method. On the other hand, some others say that such a school has several drawbacks: the expensive cost and the loss of freedom. Therefore, I would suggest that a boarding school cannot render the best education for the pupils.In conclusion, this positive trend will develop and become more popular in all over the world. It creates a new page of services and quality in education.
Also your conclusion has to restate your previous opinions and a recommendation. Let me give a try;
To sum up, this is apparent that there are some disadvantages in attending a boarding school. This school costs a large amount of money, which is not really worth. The students will also experience such a depression in their study, as they cannot have their normal and free life. Where possible, the parents should send their children to the day school.Well, good luck in your study! - Vania Herlambang
